Attribution: Alex Proimos
Image: Teenagers at Play (here)
Written for Irene's hosting at We Write Poems #5
Chosen 22 words out of 33:
slung, heaviness, substance
elephant, trunk, queer
fireflies, ribbons, porch
sliver, full, crescent
cascade, grandmother
child-like, fool
green, smell, rope
wild, formidable
In heaviness though a
teenager of substance
He felt let down
Just like an elephant’s trunk
slung across his neck
His stomach felt queer as fireflies float
In ribbons of crescent lights
Child-like seemed like a fool
With smells of hard liquor
He left the party
He cut across the street
To a quaint little house
Settled at the porch
Full of sliver frothing at the mouth
Sweat cascade freely
From his brows
The door opened slowly
A grandmother peeked out
His grandmother
‘He’s still green, he’s just a kid
He’ll go wild in a few years
He's still learning the ropes
He’ll be formidable!’
She knows, seen many
Before him
Image: Teenagers at Play (here)
Written for Irene's hosting at We Write Poems #5
Chosen 22 words out of 33:
slung, heaviness, substance
elephant, trunk, queer
fireflies, ribbons, porch
sliver, full, crescent
cascade, grandmother
child-like, fool
green, smell, rope
wild, formidable
In heaviness though a
teenager of substance
He felt let down
Just like an elephant’s trunk
slung across his neck
His stomach felt queer as fireflies float
In ribbons of crescent lights
Child-like seemed like a fool
With smells of hard liquor
He left the party
He cut across the street
To a quaint little house
Settled at the porch
Full of sliver frothing at the mouth
Sweat cascade freely
From his brows
The door opened slowly
A grandmother peeked out
His grandmother
‘He’s still green, he’s just a kid
He’ll go wild in a few years
He's still learning the ropes
He’ll be formidable!’
She knows, seen many
Before him
slowly he will be mature and start handling things
ReplyDeleteI like the grandmother. Deftly done.
ReplyDeleteWhen maturity sets in things will come automatically.
ReplyDeleteEnjoyed another good read Hank.
Yvonne.
for some it takes a much longer time for them to grow to maturity...
ReplyDeletewe can always hope, like that mother...
Yes, often it seems the Grandmothers have seen it all.
ReplyDeleteThanks for the memories, what a swift visit to a happy, carefree, warmer world. Your photo by itself says it all too!
ReplyDeleteEventually one will come to their senses but have to go wild a bit to see it
ReplyDeleteGranny always knows best!!
ReplyDeleteGrandmothers are so good at seeing things in a positive life!
ReplyDelete"light" - not life!
DeleteIf wisdom came automatically to the young, there would be no need of grandmothers who see what others might miss,
ReplyDeleteElizabeth
Experience is the best teacher; the grandmother in her wisdom seems to know that. Your words paint a vivid picture of the young man's disappointment, the night scene, and the unseen door opening as she watches him. Nice use of the words.
ReplyDelete-Nicole
Good one, Hank. Grandmothers are always more positive than parents.
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