Wednesday, December 30, 2015

Lone magpie the loudest

                                                                                             Attribution: Tim Watts
Image: A Lone Magpie (here)

Haiku
The Technique of Narrowing Focus
For haiku writing of a -5-7-5 syllable count  -  
-  To start with a wide-angle lens approach in the first line (5)
-  switch to a normal lens for the second line (7) and
-  zoom in for a close-up at the third.(5)

Peaceful country-side (5)
Chirping birds sing up the trees (7)
Lone magpie loudest(5)

Cool misty mornings (5)
Blessed soul venturing outdoors (7)
Mitten covered hands (5)

Happy young lovers
Holding hands along the path
Girl whispers sweetly

For Chev's CARPE DIEM writing tecniques #25
-  The Technique of Narrowing Focus
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6 comments:

  1. Bastet's Waka LibraryDecember 30, 2015 at 4:39 AM

    A lovely set of haiku you've written here, why did you number the lines Hank, just curious? Bastet

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    1. kaykualaDecember 30, 2015 at 5:00 AM

      Georgia Ma'am,
      I link up selected poems to FBook. I have friends, nephews and nieces who follow them. The numbers help those new to haiku to understand them better.

      Hank

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  2. Pat HattDecember 30, 2015 at 6:01 AM

    Holding hands and mittens, both keep hands warm.

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  3. AnonymousDecember 30, 2015 at 8:41 PM

    great haiku and thanks for your explaination on numbering - you're helping to educate many who otherwise would not have the opportunity to learn this form

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  4. jazzytowerDecember 30, 2015 at 11:06 PM

    A nice set Hank, I especially liked the 3rd one:)
    Pat

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  5. nashvillecats2December 30, 2015 at 11:43 PM

    This was lovely to read Hank.
    Yvonne.

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