Sunday, January 25, 2015

Succulent to the inner self

                                                                                          Attribution: Ishai Parasol
Image: Camel Convoy in Jordan Valley (here)

The given words:
aim chime miles trite scorch maybe
spirit mind spell sign words land

To aim a chime on a tired soul
In a slush trudging in a sea of sand
Following one behind the other
In a long line for miles to nowhere

Perhaps to hit an oasis a trite too soon
Melting under the scorch of the burning sun
An option of not many choices

Maybe in spirit the mind spells fun
A sign of not accepting defeat
Where words of wisdom
Succulent to the inner self
Can bear trying times

In a land of opportunity
That a desert can offer
It can well be fun

For Brenda's hosting at
Sunday Whirl Wordle # 196 and
Mary's at PU's Poetry Pantry #236
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28 comments:

  1. ClaudiaJanuary 25, 2015 at 5:21 AM

    in a land of opportunity... you know... i like people who see opportunity even under difficult circumstances - where others see just sand

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  2. MaryJanuary 25, 2015 at 5:22 AM

    Ah, those words of wisdom can be found even when there are trying times....in the same way that one can find an oasis on the desert! Happy Sunday, Hank.

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  3. Brian MillerJanuary 25, 2015 at 5:24 AM

    staying together like that would be the best for survival...especially out in the sea of sand...

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  4. brudbergJanuary 25, 2015 at 5:44 AM

    A caravan of opportunities - there has to be an oasis there somewhere.

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  5. GabriellaJanuary 25, 2015 at 6:08 AM

    I had never thought of this but I guess a desert can indeed be a land of opportunity.

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  6. kelvin s.m.January 25, 2015 at 6:21 AM

    Seeing more in a place like the desert is adorable. Well, there's certainly great opportunities that lie ahead the seemingly endless march of crossing the desert. Opportunity to gain experience, gather memories, wisdom & discipline that are worth beyond any material reward. Wonderful, Hank. Enjoyed it a lot.

    - ksm

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  7. WolfsrosebudJanuary 25, 2015 at 6:28 AM

    you took us to another place...

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  8. Pat HattJanuary 25, 2015 at 6:33 AM

    There can always be a positive if we are willing to look, like for a cat the desert is a big litterbox lol

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  9. annell4January 25, 2015 at 6:34 AM

    Maybe?

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  10. Holy Ghost WriterJanuary 25, 2015 at 6:44 AM

    Have to set our sights on the horizon

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  11. NatašekJanuary 25, 2015 at 7:17 AM

    in a land of opportunity.. we should see that everywhere..

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  12. UnknownJanuary 25, 2015 at 11:16 AM

    in a long line in the desert we have to direct our mind to something... like a well
    Love the way your wound these words together

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  13. flaubertJanuary 25, 2015 at 12:08 PM

    Like this,, Hank and your use of "trite" is perfect. Happy Sunday!

    Pamela

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  14. Sherry Blue SkyJanuary 25, 2015 at 12:36 PM

    What a spectacular title that is, Hank. I love the photo, and your poem! I especially love "words of wisdom/ Succulent to the inner self/ Can bear trying times" So true.

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  15. UnknownJanuary 25, 2015 at 2:12 PM

    This was a nice twist on a desert and how it can be equally as fun as somewhere else.

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  16. totomaiJanuary 25, 2015 at 2:36 PM

    i haven't been to middle east yet but have clients working in oil and gas industry. i think it can be fun there :)

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  17. AnonymousJanuary 25, 2015 at 3:37 PM

    I believe there is always that choice: to look for and find the beauty of the place we are in, or rile ourselves up and waste a lot of energy.

    Elizabeth

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  18. TruedessaJanuary 25, 2015 at 4:20 PM

    I imagine the journey long and hard and at the end one might appreciate a water oasis all the more.

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  19. CloudiaJanuary 25, 2015 at 5:10 PM

    you start with tricky almost Shakespearean word action, then end with natural and wise syllables that the tongue wants to repeat. . . .


    ALOHA from Honolulu
    ComfortSpiral
    <3

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  20. SuyashJJanuary 25, 2015 at 7:27 PM

    you had me interested right from the title

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  21. Old EggJanuary 25, 2015 at 9:14 PM

    Not so much fun bringing up the rear I would have thought. It brought to mind the film "Lawrence of Arabia" where the last man fell off his camel and no-one noticed. I would prefer nearer the front where the air might be fresher!

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  22. Rosemary Nissen-WadeJanuary 26, 2015 at 2:03 AM

    A clever weaving of words.

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  23. SusanJanuary 26, 2015 at 2:28 AM

    This is a new favorite! I love the comparison of the line trudging in the desert to the experiences trudging in the self.

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  24. Jae RoseJanuary 26, 2015 at 5:43 AM

    Yes fun can be found in many a desert!

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  25. Belva Rae StaplesJanuary 26, 2015 at 9:33 AM

    If we carry words of wisdom (well watered, of course), it is possible to bear hard times. I like this lots.

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  26. Gen Giggles January 27, 2015 at 1:10 PM

    Interesting ideas expressed. The idea of reaching an oasis early really struck me as truth.

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  27. Wendy BourkeJanuary 27, 2015 at 6:25 PM

    Many nuanced metaphors in this piece. A wonderful bit of writing!

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  28. Stacy M.S.January 31, 2015 at 5:49 PM

    this poem is a beautiful portrayal that makes me believe we see what we want to see.

    thought provoking work!

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