Thursday, March 24, 2016

He took some hard battering on his ego

                                                                                                Attribution: Pingz Man
Image:  Sad looking (here)

Sunday Whirligig's 11 of 12 given words:
battering shine forbid miracle hold 
brass meditation stone, earth, sea, honey

He took some hard battering on his ego
Wrought the shine rudely off his pride
He sought the courage to make it flow
God forbid, a miracle ought  to take flight

Holding back tears from streaming down
Ashen face brass-like stoic and transformed
No amount of meditation could hide the frown
The bittersweet feelings of the uninformed

Not etched in stone could still be salvaged
Earth below not shaking, the sea restrained
Sinister in his resolve gently riding the wave
Honey sweet image successfully retained

For MMT's Sunday's Whirligig #52 and
Marian's at Real Toad's - with bittersweet (the
unbridled heart-soaring to the point of tears)


  1. That is a great opening stanza, hank, to guide the reader through the poem.

  2. The second line of the second stanza is so vivid. We feel the rudeness of the loss (of the theft), and what it will cost.

  3. Hiding behind a smile can hold something rather vile

  4. This feels like such a stinging loss, though there is that suggestion that the situation is far from resolved.

  5. Simply wonderful Hank, loved the picture also.

  6. I agree about your opening...sets the tone. Well done, Hank.

  7. Yeah, this is a moment for sure. Two paths and only one can be taken :) Love that second line in particular.

  8. quite interesting; sometimes a miracle needs be constructed, just by taking a good hard look at oneself and doing a little polishing where its absolutely needed

    much love...

  9. A perfect opening....Love your second stanza. It is tough to make amends with a battered ego.