Sunday, August 25, 2013

The Sunday Whirl

Image: Courtesy of Sunday Whirl

Sunday Whirl with the following words:
bitter cries enough fierce filters gusting 
keep out pieces springs south train

bitter cries filter through,
putting enough feelings of success
into his train of thoughts

the gusting winds carried the sounds
of fierce barking further south
clearly the deer and the doe are
surrounded within the clump of
bushes in the center

the hunters try to keep pieces of
information that springs out of the
crackling wireless set to a low volume

it will be just a matter of time!


Written for Brenda's Sunday Whirl Wordle #123
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17 comments:

  1. Vandana SharmaAugust 25, 2013 at 1:42 AM

    poaching is a serious threat not only to wildlife, but to human life also as it imbalances natural ecological cycle.

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  2. Ramesh SoodAugust 25, 2013 at 2:18 AM

    Very thought provoking...Thanks Hank for such a treat.. I have tried too..to weave something around twelve words...

    http://rameshsood.blogspot.in/2013/08/smile-glows-through-his-whole-being.html

    RS

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  3. Wabi SabiAugust 25, 2013 at 3:01 AM

    So sad for the deer and the doe!!

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  4. Old EggAugust 25, 2013 at 4:22 AM

    For all our years of evolving we still can't shed the primeval desire to hunt. Is there no hope for us?

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  5. Brian MillerAugust 25, 2013 at 4:31 AM

    it will indeed....pretty cool the hunting story you got out of this hank...have to imagine it would be pretty exciting following the hounds...

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  6. aspiritofsimplicityAugust 25, 2013 at 5:18 AM

    yes...hunting season is coming up.

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  7. annell4August 25, 2013 at 5:21 AM

    Traps should be set for pochers...why can't they just leave wildlife alone?

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  8. Stan SkiAugust 25, 2013 at 6:05 AM

    Patience is a virtue...

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  9. Pat HattAugust 25, 2013 at 7:33 AM

    Sitting there so still in the bushes so long, sure not for me

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  10. flaubertAugust 25, 2013 at 8:12 AM

    Hank, I am not a fan of hunting, but you've written a succinct little story here, and the second stanza is gorgeous.

    Pamela

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  11. Gillena CoxAugust 25, 2013 at 12:06 PM

    a good write, a tale well told, have a nice Sunday


    much love...

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  12. daphnepurpusAugust 25, 2013 at 1:30 PM

    Powerfully done and I so feel for the deer and the doe!

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  13. humbirdAugust 25, 2013 at 4:07 PM

    thoughtful poem, sorry for deers...

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  14. AnonymousAugust 25, 2013 at 9:00 PM

    See, this is why I don't hunt, Hank! I'm too busy rooting for the deer.

    Having said that, you took the Wordle in an entirely unique direction, and there was not a single "forced" word, you know what I mean. Every single word was relevant. Great job, Amelita

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  15. Madeleine Begun KaneAugust 25, 2013 at 11:16 PM

    Very well done!

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  16. MiskyAugust 27, 2013 at 2:04 AM

    Nice tale, Hank, and well stitched together with those pesky words.

    ~ Misky

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  17. AnonymousJune 2, 2015 at 4:07 AM

    Very well done.

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