Just the cellar pit
only the catbird
recalls
the swing of the
gate
All others will not bother
Such trivial matters can wait
Just the cellar pit
only the catbird
recalls
the swing of the
gate
Savior to those caught napping
from foolishly tempting fate
Note: It comprised
a Mabson Southard’s haiku of 5-7-5
syllables (in italics) and we are to complete it with 2 lines
of 7-7 syllables for a Tan Renga
syllables (in italics) and we are to complete it with 2 lines
of 7-7 syllables for a Tan Renga
Written for Chev’s CARPE DIEM’s Tan Renga Challenge #12,
of Southard’s ‘the swing of the gate’ haiku
"Savior to those caught napping
ReplyDeletefrom foolishly tempting fate"
A very fitting ending to a short and beautiful poem. Many thanks.
Greetings from London.
ha. cool. i esp like the second one, its got just a bit of edge....
ReplyDeletei enjoyed both your haiku endings.
ReplyDeleteI love where your second ending took me!
ReplyDeleteWhat a nice completion of the Tan Renga by Mabson Southard that second [...] Savior to those caught napping / from foolishly tempting fate [...] is my favorite. Although I like the first too. Thank you Hank for your respons on this Tan Renga Challenge.
ReplyDeletevery nice. I like the first one best.
ReplyDeleteI like what you did!
ReplyDeleteI like both of your 7-7 and thank you for braving the challenge with feeling in each
ReplyDeleteDon't want to be caught like that, at my mat
ReplyDeleteThings can wait
ReplyDeleteAh that second one is great...
ReplyDeleteThe first one has that humor in it that almost make it a renku