Friday, August 9, 2013

Separation Without a Word

                                                                                                 User: Kieff
Image: The Pangaea before the Continental Drift
Source: Wikimedia Commons (here)

Across ocean blue 
pining for you when you break
up without a word

Roving blue waters
come in between like slow drift 
of huge land masses

Only memories
sustain good times of young hearts’
purest endearment 

Written for Leo's Haiku Heights # 269 with Prompt  - ocean
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15 comments:

  1. Siggi in Downeast MaineAugust 9, 2013 at 7:47 PM

    A musical feel to the written words when being read.
    Enjoyed how the stanzas told a story.
    Peace
    Siggi

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    1. kaykualaAugust 10, 2013 at 1:26 AM

      Thanks Siggi! That's the beauty of haiku. It can be a stand alone or it's a continuation of a story!

      Hank

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  2. Sharp Little PencilAugust 9, 2013 at 8:20 PM

    Love how you used the schism of the continents with voices as the ocean prompt. I wonder how many folks will notice those lines, human-made of course, but in this case, sublime notations of what that one land mass must have looked like. It HAD to, because the puzzle is so complete... A really thought-provoking post, Hank. Gotta hand it to you! Thx for the voodoo comment, too! Amelita

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    1. kaykualaAugust 10, 2013 at 1:23 AM

      Thanks Amelita for a gem of a comment! I had often wondered too of the truth of the continental drift.It's liken to the yearnings of lost love which was there but now broken up. It's spot on Ma'am!

      Hank

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  3. CloudiaAugust 10, 2013 at 1:34 AM

    You made Earth even deeper!


    ALOHA from Honolulu
    Comfort Spiral
    ~ > < } } ( ° >

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  4. Sumana RoyAugust 10, 2013 at 2:27 AM



    unique....

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  5. Brian MillerAugust 10, 2013 at 4:04 AM

    mmm the seperation...with no word...you have to wonder of those people that were once in out lives...who have since disappeared.....

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  6. UnknownAugust 10, 2013 at 6:01 AM

    I love how you have given words to the continental drift theory ...delicately, as if remembering a legend of a broken heart...

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  7. Pat HattAugust 10, 2013 at 9:24 AM

    As occuring as the sun, always some separation will be done

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  8. ClaudiaAugust 10, 2013 at 11:46 AM

    once so close...now miles and miles of water between them...you wonder how it happens sometimes..

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  9. eyeographyAugust 10, 2013 at 11:17 PM

    well written..
    the meaning of earth's existence...in turn ours...

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  10. NankaAugust 11, 2013 at 3:39 AM

    Nice pic to go with the beautiful poem Hank!! How that larger land mass clings together and the little one clinging on, with fear of breaking away, like a child holding onto its mother's finger!!

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  11. AnonymousAugust 12, 2013 at 12:50 AM

    I agree these haiku did have a marvelous lyrical quality, powerful and emotional as well brilliant work Hank =)

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  12. UnknownAugust 12, 2013 at 9:19 PM

    Very imaginative! Imagery is unique!

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  13. Maggie GraceAugust 13, 2013 at 10:21 AM

    I too love the image...before whatever catastrophe created the great divide. Am particularly fond of your first haiku. Lovely.

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