Image: Were these all the choices then? (here)
Reflecting on life's blessings
Little nudges to the memories
Retracing paths trudged wondering
What otherwise could be the stories
A touch of gray on decisions taken
If she had managed to steal his heart
But he had rejected it oh, so brazen
Would they be better off for a start
Would riches pile high all their life
Shrieks of beautiful children heard
Instead of struggling to survive
Sadly childless amid cries of hurts
What then of the path not taken
And had lady luck smiled often?
For Grace's at d'Verse's OLN #173 and
Fireblossom's Friday at Real Toad's
- a touch of gray where even good
things can have a tinge of regret to them
Definitely food for thought, which is what i hope dfor with this prompt. Thanks.
ReplyDeleteah that tinge of regret.....
ReplyDeleteI like to change from grey to neon pink -- moving on into the spotlights so to speak! :)
Intriguing poem, especially as I tried to link it with the picture, but I think it's just the 'touch of gray' I should focus on, right? I particularly like your clever rhymes and near-rhymes. The only thing that doesn't quite work for me is that this line:
ReplyDeleteInstead of having to struggle to survive
feels too long compared to the others, so it jars. Perhaps cut it down to 'instead of struggling to survive'?
Got it Marina Ma'am! Yes, that sounds very much better! Thanks for feedback most kind!
DeleteHank
various paths comes to be, sometimes we just have to try and pick the best and hope it's right.
ReplyDeleteI do think there are those paths we never walk that can keep nagging us,,, but we never do know, do we?
ReplyDeleteVery thought provoking Hank and wonderfully put.
ReplyDeleteYvonne.
Yes, the path taken always leaves us wondering where the other one might have led. Well-expressed, Hank.
ReplyDeleteYes there is always that tinge of regret - all things must come to an end.
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