Victoria is hosting at dVerse. She has challenged us to create
Steampunk Poetry. It is taking two contrasting topics and merging them in a
poem. I’ve chosen one, the Year End
Sales and two, the impending year end exams ( in italics) Hoping I’m doing it correctly
Victoria also asked us to use enjambment. This is the
literary practice of breaking up a unit of syntax ( a phrase or sentence) at
the end of a line ( or even between two verses ) I've not tried it here!.
Y.E.S. The Year End Sales is in the offing
The heat is on, the
year end exams are here too
Everyone’s all worked up anxiously waiting
Last minute preparations are keeping them busy
Clawing back on what is deemed necessary
Boys and girls are
glued to their notes
To supplement what’s left of the recent ones
Those who had been
googling for answers before
Will know there are bargains on the cheap?
They are now
struggling looking for whatever notes
Or is it just a ploy to get rid off of what’s left
Worst off are the cut-and-paste
practitioners
But who cares! They are convenient
There are those who
seem to just relax
One must be smart to pick out one's needs
They can well
afford to do so for they were prepared
But the yuppies are more into the fun of it
They were busy from
the beginning of the year
To make a kill, a real one at that
Now they are having
fun, less pressure on themselves
It’ll be the conversation piece the next day
They yearn to get
into it rightaway
Everyone would want to have a say
To get it over
with, off their shoulders
The office will be real busy but work suffers
There are other
more important things to do
Talking and comparing, showing offs
Songs and games,
facebook and what have you
That is more fun and Y.E.S had only just begun
The so-called life
of deprivation will soon be over
Written for d'Verse where Victoria is hosting
ha...cool job hank...when it comes to year end sales i always ask myself one single question: would i buy it for the full price as well? if not, i leave it...see you got me all sidetracked...smiles.. for me this has a fine connection...has both to do with hunting somehow...just for different things
ReplyDeleteYear end sales do entice me at times, but then, it depends :-)
ReplyDeleteGosh, I'm still resisting the end of summer here, your poem of the year end sales scares me! LOL
ReplyDeleteI could see all these eager youths and others all ready and waiting to get going at the sales. Very vivid :)
One must be smart to pick out one's needs...
ReplyDeleteAnd aint that the truth! Well said, it jumped out. Fine poem from one who's on a roll just now.
ha two things that are rather scary to me...exams and sales....i still dream of exams or maybe that is nightmares...and sales...oy only to people watch would i go....too much chaos in each...i like the way you wne tback and forth with each line man...
ReplyDeleteVery creative Hank ~ I like the thoughts weaving off each other ~ We just have a day for this, its on Dec. 26, Boxing Day ~
ReplyDeleteI agree with Heaven. The thoughts weaving off each other work well in this poem, Hank. One can easily see the comparisons and contrasts that way! But, ha, I would more enjoy a sale than an exam.
ReplyDeleteThat was quite the weave
ReplyDeleteBoth worked together well
They do pull sales out their sleeve
And under their sleeves the students cheat before the final bell
Wow! Hank you got way ahead of me and it turned out nice.
ReplyDeleteStill, I had to read one poem at a time. And I liked the students with exam troubles or not the best.
I am like Brian, I still dream (in my sleep, real dreams) of exam time. Seems I am never ready as I missed soooo many classes. Some I missed the whole year until exam time. On those I, in my dreams, have trouble finding my classroom.
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I don't blame you for not trying the enjambment with this one. It must have gotten complicated making it 'sort of fit together' as it was.
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So good, Hank. Great idea for constrasting topics and the way you've used italics is perfect. Wish I'd thought of that (although I havent tried steampunk yet...it kind of intimidates me. :0>
ReplyDeleteGood post Hank, It all depends if I need anything in these end of year sales. Some shops seam to have sales all year round especially the furniture and carpets.
ReplyDeleteYvonne.
Love the combination here, great steampunk.
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