Intruding into his mind
Paltry in substance
Tugged at his conscience
Recalcitrant in nature
Could he overcome?
Fragile and wrinkled
Fabric of feeble facade
A scarecrow of self
Sought for divine
help
Offered strength of character
Had hopes of success
Written for Chev's Carpe Diem #7 with prompt -fragile- Poetry Pantry #118 and One Single Impression's #241-scarecrow-
Really good job!
ReplyDeleteGreat words. We're best when we strive.
ReplyDeleteYou are amazing, Hank.. Great piece!
ReplyDeleteAwesome series of haiku Hank. Very evocative. The third touches me the most. Thank you for sharing and being part in Carpe Diem.
ReplyDeleteA good progression. Wonderful story.
ReplyDeleteGreat crafting. You've done excellently well with the given words.
ReplyDeleteGreat!! This is expressing the whole story.
ReplyDeleteSayantini Bhattacharya
another part of me
Masterful use of those words, Hank!
ReplyDeleteHope indeed can get one through
ReplyDeleteWhen stuck and wasting away from view
Well said, Hank. Love the hopefulness of the ending, and the strength of character.
ReplyDeleteWell said, Hank. Love the hopefulness of the ending, and the strength of character.
ReplyDeletenice progressive haiku..amazing!!
ReplyDeleteI really like the line "a scarecrow of self" very nice
ReplyDeletenice...really nice hank...i like the progression in this...i like the turn to positive and hope there in the end...hope you had a great weekend man...
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ReplyDeleteinsightful interesting piece !!
ReplyDelete"Hopes of success" - loved it !!!
ReplyDeleteThe third stanza really grabbed me--really a well written piece
ReplyDeleteI always enjoy seeing what poets do with prompts... this is great...
ReplyDeleteA great story in few words.
ReplyDeleteGreat set of haiku. I especially liked the third one. It speaks loudly.
ReplyDeleteNice write, Hank! We have a song, old now, that came to mind:
ReplyDelete"High Hopes lyrics
Next time you're found, with your chin on the ground
There a lot to be learned, so look around
Just what makes that little old ant
Think he'll move that rubber tree plant
Anyone knows an ant, can't
Move a rubber tree plant
But he's got high hopes, he's got high hopes
He's got high apple pie, in the sky
... "
Love that fabric of feeble facade. Excellent use of the prompt words!
ReplyDeleteThis story leaves me hanging. Somehow, I think it isn't finished yet. It's not yet time to say, "The end."
ReplyDeleteFragile
"Recalcitrant" and "paltry" in one piece...fantastic word choice. I admire vocabulary.
ReplyDeleteHank, what a complicated character you have created here. I agree with Jack about the vocabulary in this. Your character seems to have found more strength by the end. And man, do I love a happy ending. Peace, and thanks for supportive words during my week in Computer Hell! Amy
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