Whisper mood thunder
storm hissing
rattling stirs floats scrubbed
sun
It was almost in a whisper
The mood was set
Missing was the thunder
But they got away with it
They cooked up a storm
Hissing and rattling to no end
Stirred lots of macabre forms
Of zombies and fiends
Kept floating on his mind
Endearment of his loved one
Designed as a provocation
Go away vultures! Such annoyance
Scrubbed clean he yearned
Bad dreams were such nuisance
Waiting cringed in a baby position
Impatiently for the morning sun
Written for Miskey's We Write Poems Wordle#2
and shared with Open Link Monday at Real Toads
Written for Miskey's We Write Poems Wordle#2
and shared with Open Link Monday at Real Toads
Nightmares can be surreal
ReplyDeleteBut one can turn them around and then good dreams can be found
ReplyDeleteI wonder sometimes what the mind sees .. some we remember others for some reason we don't...
ReplyDeleteI love my nightmares, Hank. Weird, but it is an experience of which there is no other way to enjoy. For a bit I could see here a witch's brew being stirred up, conjured up in my mind.
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Hi! our minds are open to so much- this was a good read- I like how you took a number of words and wove them into your writing.
ReplyDelete(newbie to mon. toads)
sounds like some overwelming stress there...that they got away with it...but haunting for sure....
ReplyDeleteI used to struggle with repetitive nightmares until I learned to work with the dream images. Some of what you write is familiar, especially that curled fetal position you mention at the end. You did well with the wordle words,
ReplyDeleteElizabeth
first stanza is my favorite ~
ReplyDeleteHank, You did a fantastic job with the words here.
ReplyDeleteHope all is well with you, my friend.
Pamela
Kinda spooky.............
ReplyDeleteGlad I'm reading this in the morning and not before I went to bed!
ReplyDeleteI adore the edginess of this poem. It's tight and tense, and very memorable. Thank you very much, Hank, for joining us for this week's We Wordle. Hope to see you again next week!
ReplyDeleteMisky
I know too well of nightmares...
ReplyDeleteI've been told that writing about them gives them honor and sets them free.
I played here:
http://juleslongerstrandsofgems.wordpress.com/2014/01/13/qweekly-and-wwp-more-than-just-a-ticket/
Thanks for joining We Write Poems, bunch of nice folks here!
i can relate.
ReplyDeleteno need to wait for the sun… the internet is there :)
ReplyDeleteOhhhh, that's a little bit frightening!
ReplyDeleteThese words puzzled in perfectly! I like the addition of the buzzard imagery and the bad dreams. Nicely done!
ReplyDeleteIt was almost in a whisper the mood was set...great opening lines. Can't stop reading after reading those.
ReplyDeleteWelcome to WWP, Hank. I love the story you weaved with the words.
ReplyDeleteInterestingly enough, when I read Misky's comment above ("It's tight and tense, and very memorable") my subconscious turned "memorable" into "miserable". And it is that too...your images convey the horror and misery your character endures from these eidolons in the night.
-Nicole