Friday, January 3, 2014

Exuberance of Success

                                                                                 Attribution: Jonathab Billinger
Image: Spectacle of Golfing Greens
Source: Wikimedia Commons (here)

Chev gave a haiku of Shiku to revise,

a basket of grass,
and no one there, 
mountains of spring   -  Shiku

My response is to relate nature's
beauty to elation of success

Mowed to a smoothness
Perfect roll for a golf ball
Silky carpet ‘greens’

Cut grass in basket
What is left a spectacle
Visual legacy

Fervor of chatter
Singular shrieks of laughter
Swooning winsome feel

Rowdy nature’s child
Enthusiastic lunacy
Fresh exuberance

Note: Trying to capture in the latter 2 stanzas the
exuberance of a hole-in-one which rarely happens

Written for Chev's CARPE DIEM, Revise that haiku #4  -  a basket of grass


7 comments:

  1. Having such a moment would sure be cause for success and cheers

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  2. ha. i can get a little crazy with nature....smiles...
    umm, not ready to think about cutting the grass yet though
    ha

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  3. I think you have captured that exuberance nicely, Hank. I cant imagine anything more difficult than getting a teeny tiny ball into a small hole hundreds of feet away.

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  4. What a cool take! I would never have thought of this.

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  5. nature,,,always a pleasure to write about

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  6. Always something going on with Mother Nature, excellent post Hank.

    Yvonne.

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