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The 20 words chosen:
harsh, hurt,
humiliation,rendering, rules
ridicule, crowd, caught, changing, brazen,
platitudes, sacrifice, obvious, asking,
answers,
desire, darkness, deeply, lunatic, lived
Harsh humiliations unwittingly provoked
Without a cause that made it hurt most
Happy to be back instead ridiculed and mocked
In platitudes of brazen and consistent doses
It set him thinking asking deeply into fondness
He made and lived for, a desire for actions
Maturity as a guide but caught in the darkness
He could only despair in obvious frustrations
He wanted answers for sacrifices he had made
Changing rules an option that would suffice
Rendering some assistance to the crowd could help
Only a lunatic failed to appreciate his sacrifices
Only a lunatic failed to appreciate his sacrifices, nice job.
ReplyDeleteSometimes the answers just never come
ReplyDelete"It set him thinking asking" "He wanted answers " "He could only despair in obvious frustrations"
ReplyDeleteSometimes, the answer just isn't good enough even if you do get one. Nicely done with your word choices.
Nicely done incorporating all those words. Great last line.. brings it home.
ReplyDeleteNicely done, Hank. 20 words is a lot and you not only used them all but saved your theme. I was reminded of the Stealers Wheel early 70's song (Steve Miller), Here I am, it goes
ReplyDeleteClowns to the left of me, Jokers to the right,
here I am, Stuck in the middle with you.
Yes I'm stuck in the middle with you,
And I'm wondering what it is I should do,
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well done.. the use of all the words was excellent.. and I really liked
ReplyDelete"He wanted answers for sacrifices he had made"
Yes excellent use of the words--it is interesting where lists of words will take us. Nicely done.
ReplyDeleteAnswer will come eventually, sometimes too late
ReplyDeleteIts a very touching poem of broken hopes and dreams by crushing down the soul of a person. Wish people could be more nice and understanding.
ReplyDeleteOh... that last paragraph belies the failure here... expectations, assumptions, unfulfilled. The source of much disappointment!
ReplyDeleteThis really sounds like a lot of my frustrations with the changing world. Nicely done.
ReplyDeleteMaturity can always be a good guide!
ReplyDeleteIt is so frustrating when the answers we are looking for are not forth coming. But then, is sacrifice really a sacrifice if something is expected in return? Thought provoking piece,
ReplyDeleteElizabeth
And it is frustrating when we are unappreciated, cut down, and insulted. Maybe your speaker needs to find a better crowd of people. :)
ReplyDelete-Nicole
More than one writer chose humiliations, and I like how you focused the emotion of the writing through a single character.
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