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‘Make a wish’, quickly!
Only when one is lucky
To spot the tailings..
A Shooting Star
In the still of the night
A light breeze lazily passes by
Brushing my cheeks
lightly
A wisp of my hair flailing on top
What can be more peaceful
Looking up the night sky
As if in collusion bids a common stance
All quiet nothing disturbs
Except for the slight movements
Of rustling leaves on the quiet
Suddenly, ‘ make a wish, make a wish’
Excitement fills the air
From around me, some distance away
Camouflaged by the shadows
Young lovers warm in embrace
Alive in an instance
Aware of nature’s sudden entrance
Long tailings bright in the silent night
A ‘shooting star’ for all its glory!
Submitted for Chev's Haikublog Tackle it Tuesday with prompt - shooting stars
The embrace I would take
ReplyDeleteA wish though I may or may not make
As it is a nice thought
But a I think it's a bit of fluff by a whole lot
And first
With my burst.
The embrace I would take
ReplyDeleteA wish though I may or may not make
As it is a nice thought
But a I think it's a bit of fluff by a whole lot
And first
With my burst.
Nice post Pare...
ReplyDeleteMade my wish: a wonderful weekend in Wash DC... Going there this Fri til sun... Yohoo!..
Pareng JJ
hank this is beautiful verse....love all the texture in it...and the bit of magic in a shooting star as well...seriously this is a fav of yours...
ReplyDeleteHmm I read into this in the end that the shape of the shooting star to be very sperm like and well the young loves rustling in bushes and all. Any way, I don't know if you meant to do that but I liked it...great poem!!
ReplyDeletePat
ReplyDeleteYou're first!
And you can make a wish
To fulfill a thirst
Luck on a golden dish
PareJJ
It'll be fun. Try not to miss the changing of guards
Brian
Thanks.A haiku is too sketchy I thought so included a free verse as support
Hannah
Didn't think that way at first. But it appears amazingly ok with your explanation
Hank
Love this one Hank, the way you have broadened the thought and made it more inclusive.
ReplyDeleteHank, I like that first one, the haiku. It stands to reason that IF one is lucky he will have to catch the shooting star with a tailing. When the tailing is gone, the 'star' goes out.
ReplyDeleteAn aside, when shooting stars are forecast I generally try to see them. The last time I tried I saw about four in my half hour. Most times I can't even see them.
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I like the two meme's that I do together. There is a small number of participants so I most of the time can return all my comments.
There is a third Thursday meme I do, also posted now, going Through the Alphabet with Jenny. Today was the "B" word.
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Oh, I love making a wish :)
ReplyDeleteLovely visuals Hank.
I have made a wish! That "Tackle It Tuesday" will become a success. I think that wish has come true.
ReplyDeleteI am glad to see your entry Kaykuala thank you for sharing.
Shall we wish this then
ReplyDeleteon the star; bring us more luck
to sight you often
:)
Lovely haiku of yours, Hank!