Sunday, April 23, 2017

Must I police you like a criminal? - U

                                                                           Author: Burrows-Ackerman/Allied Artists
Image: Rod Steiger in Al Capone
from the trailer for the film. (here)

Note: Yves at MLMM says,
For this week, I would like you to write a dialogue piece
- by making two different characters talk (here)

U for Ultimatum Issued in the Quest to be Healthy

Don’t you dare mess around with me
I’ve had enough of your kind
Must I police you like a criminal?
I mean….I know that fits you
But must you make me say it?
You…criminal!

But..but..
No buts here
You’re either with me or you are not.

I know..Boss..but
I’m not your boss
I’m your brother-in-law
You forgot you married my sister, huh?

No, I mean yes, that’s a fact. 
Everyone knows!

And...?
Why it takes you so long.
Say so, say it right

We tried everything. 
Many specialists
And?

Well..
Come on..make it fast!.
The best there are?

Yes, the best!
I’ll pummel your face!

But we did!
You mean my sister is barren?

Yves at MLMM's  - dialogue pairings
Heather at A to Z Challenge - U
Mary's at PU's Poetry Pantry #350
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22 comments:

  1. Pat HattApril 23, 2017 at 2:08 PM

    a back and forth that could surely get nasty, ultimatum like the cat, how about that.

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  2. Sherry Blue SkyApril 23, 2017 at 3:02 PM

    This is a fast-paced and tense, tight piece of dialogue, Hank. Really well done.

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  3. MichaelApril 23, 2017 at 3:18 PM

    Excellent use of the dialogue Hank, so nicely done.

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  4. MaryApril 23, 2017 at 3:40 PM

    This conversational poem rocks, Hank!

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  5. nashvillecats2April 23, 2017 at 4:37 PM

    A situation I would not like to be in, Very well expressed Hank.
    Yvonne.

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  6. Magaly GuerreroApril 23, 2017 at 4:39 PM

    This is fantastic dialogue, Hank. I can see the punches and the cringes in the words.

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  7. totomaiApril 23, 2017 at 5:07 PM

    I love dialogue-type poetry, Hank. This is intense and pretty scary to be in a situation.

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  8. Wendy BourkeApril 23, 2017 at 5:19 PM

    Great job with the dialogue ... and it can be so tricky. An intense scene - well rendered.

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  9. AnonymousApril 23, 2017 at 5:31 PM

    Leave it to you, Hank. This is intense and draws one in.

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  10. colleenApril 23, 2017 at 8:14 PM

    That's quite a conclusion. I think someone is in trouble.

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  11. Old EggApril 23, 2017 at 8:22 PM

    Well it could be him not her.

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  12. Myrna R.April 23, 2017 at 8:44 PM

    It reads like a scene from fast paced movie. I find it difficult to write dialogue but you did a great job.

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  13. Nilanjana BoseApril 23, 2017 at 11:03 PM

    Oh dear, not a happy situation...it could equally be the man who is infertile...people always looking to pin it on the women, even own sister. Well done on the poetry as usual.

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  14. Gillena CoxApril 23, 2017 at 11:13 PM

    This is quite intense Hank. You managed to get some rhymes in. Those lines I liked best. You got me with the intrigue too. You left me wondering.
    Nice!!!

    Thanks for linking to my Sunday Standard


    Much love...

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  15. J Cosmo NewberyApril 24, 2017 at 3:11 AM

    That works!

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  16. DeepaApril 24, 2017 at 3:22 AM

    The poem is awesome...

    I wonder where the "T" of A to Z challenge is???

    A Peice Of My Life

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  17. Jae RoseApril 24, 2017 at 5:09 AM

    I hope we can all police ourselves - ;)

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  18. LorraineApril 24, 2017 at 5:51 AM

    Intense and terse dialogue. A word film noir.

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  19. Rosemary Nissen-WadeApril 24, 2017 at 6:35 AM

    Interesting dialogue – and a surprise ending which nevertheless makes perfect sense.

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  20. annell4April 24, 2017 at 8:50 AM

    Interesting read!

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  21. C.C.April 25, 2017 at 8:18 AM

    Very intense.

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  22. humbirdApril 26, 2017 at 7:45 AM

    I feel the dynamics in the dialog, and contrast of characters. Very well done!

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