Attribution: Friend of Hezry
Image:1 Their Winner's Medal proudly Around their Necks
Kimie is at the Front row Fourth from left
Attribution: Friend of Hezry
Image: 2 Ecstasy of Winning
Kimie is at the back row extreme right
E for Ecstasy in the Quest to be Healthy
A Choka consists of alternating lines of five and
seven syllables ending with an extra line of seven
syllables. The total length of the poem is indefinite.
The Choka
With an open mind
With lots of expectations
They came to compete
Never a shadow of a doubt
Reining their prowess
Raring and motivated
They were on the high
Never a shadow of a doubt
Went in with gusto
Won in many of their games
Formidable team
Never a shadow of a doubt
They came off winners
In the third category
Winner's ecstasy
Such a big thrill for youngsters
Never a shadow of a doubt
The Haiku
Healthy endeavours
In whatever sports events
Ultimate winners
Note:1 Hank's second grandee, Kimie
was in his under-16 Saracen Club team
in the Victoria Institution's 10-a-side
rugby tournament last weekend
Note:2 An earlier posting (here) when
Kimie was just about starting out
For Marian's at Real Toad's -
the tuesday platform
You must be proud of him and the team Hank. I really liked the poem especially the recurring last line.
ReplyDeleteAnother day in Amble Bay!
I was a soccer coach. "Never a shadow of doubt" - The key of a winner.
ReplyDeleteGood for health, cheers ~
ReplyDeleteWonderful! It's a pleasure to read about good things!
ReplyDeletesuch pride and passion for a lovely event in a young man's life - we are blessed to share in their achievements. just last week I was proud Mama watching both her baby boys (now grown men!) win their league match! I resonate with this so much. Lovely to read you Hank - Gina (Singledust)
ReplyDeleteA super poem but it is not a haibun. I like this though and it is always good to read about winners. But,,,,it is not a haibun for haibun Monday.
ReplyDeleteMust be written in Classic Japanese form with one to two tight paragraphs with a seasonal haiku to wrap it up.
DeleteHank read the above to mean a Japanese form was asked for to take the place of the prose. Hank could not think how a Japanese prose could be different from an ordinary prose. Hank had then chosen a choka as it could be made longer just like a prose. It was not intentional. Hank will make amendments 1) by not mentioning it as a haibun and 2) to obliterate the link to d'Verse. Apologies for having read it wrongly!
Hank
Oh I like the endeavor to win
ReplyDeleteLove it, Hank. Such a great and happy group! I really enjoyed your poem... the syllable count and repeating the shadow of a doubt line really work. Yay!
ReplyDeletea very pleasing poem...thumps up for health and happiness!
ReplyDeleteCongrats to Kimie and his team. Luv today's poem and the link back poem too.
ReplyDeleteHave a nice Wednesday Hank
much love...
hail to the victors!
ReplyDeleteI can understood how proud you are. Well done Kimie!
ReplyDeleteKind regards
Anna :o]
Love the feeling of buoyancy and triumph in this :)
ReplyDeleteWhat beautiful, big smiles they all have and so much mud - that brings it all back - washing rugby kit after my son's matches!! Great poem with that forceful last line. Lovely to connect through the A-Z Challenge :) Special Teaching at Pempi’s Palace
ReplyDeleteI admire people who can write form poetry, especially strict forms like the choka. Superbly done!
ReplyDeleteNilanjana
Madly-in-Verse
Winning makes all the work worth it indeed, always a great accomplishment
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