Sunday, January 20, 2013

Bliss


Image: Courtesy of Tess' Mag

The world whirled slowly by
Medley of forms and activities
Some accepted some on the sly
And many others of mediocrity

Many who planned to procure
Executed them with perfection
But some just failed to endure
Unashamedly await for salvation

Oblivious to what transpired
The outside world was no bother
Adhering to whims and desires
Young couples aligned their rudder

In a world of their own venture
Holding hands, pitching a wish
Time stood still pristine in nature
Have we elders not savored such bliss?

Written for Tess' Magpie Tales # 152 and Open Link Monday at Real Toads
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25 comments:

  1. Brian MillerJanuary 20, 2013 at 5:28 PM

    it is nice to see those that make it, despite what goes on around them in the world...

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  2. kaykualaJanuary 20, 2013 at 7:28 PM

    Though in the months, perhaps some years ahead economically things aren't going to be that rosy. Thanks Brian!

    Hank

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  3. 21 WitsJanuary 20, 2013 at 7:47 PM

    It so reminds me of the old saying, and song, Love will keep us together!

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  4. UnknownJanuary 20, 2013 at 10:02 PM

    really nice lines in here Hank, each stanza has a really nice idea/image to reflect on. Great write. Thanks

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  5. anthonynorthJanuary 21, 2013 at 12:40 AM

    A success story. Great write.

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  6. BerowneJanuary 21, 2013 at 2:00 AM

    Pleasing and engaging. Thanks.

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  7. SueannJanuary 21, 2013 at 3:30 AM

    Yes...good to remember that young and innocent love!
    Well said
    Hugs
    SueAnn

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  8. Pat HattJanuary 21, 2013 at 6:43 AM

    Yeah things can sure happen that cause alot of grief, but wonderful when one can pull through.

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  9. UnknownJanuary 21, 2013 at 7:03 AM

    Well... I am an elder and I have!
    I quite enjoyed the cadence and flow of this piece. Your rhyme sceme is effective and uncontrived. A strong write.

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  10. AnonymousJanuary 21, 2013 at 10:36 AM

    beautiful - we have, yes

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  11. LauraJanuary 21, 2013 at 10:45 AM

    beautiful Hank, just beautiful.

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  12. Amrit SinhaJanuary 21, 2013 at 11:37 AM

    Very beautifully rendered Hank, loved the message !!!

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  13. Susan AndersonJanuary 21, 2013 at 12:30 PM

    Yes, I have savored such bliss.

    And sometimes, we manage to recapture it.

    ;)

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  14. Kathe W.January 21, 2013 at 12:48 PM

    Bliss indeed- lovely read.

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  15. Sherry Blue SkyJanuary 21, 2013 at 5:13 PM

    Always wisdom to ponder in your work, Hank! Thanks!

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  16. ScarletJanuary 21, 2013 at 5:22 PM

    How sweet Hank ~

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  17. HelenJanuary 21, 2013 at 5:53 PM

    This elder has savored bliss ... the bliss you wrote of so beautifully.

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  18. MaryJanuary 21, 2013 at 6:11 PM

    There is something wonderful about the simple act of holding hands. Well expressed here, Hank!

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  19. Susie ClevengerJanuary 21, 2013 at 8:22 PM

    So lovely...the act of holding hands can transfer such joy and love...you made it so beautiful

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  20. jasmine calyxJanuary 21, 2013 at 8:35 PM

    This is my favorite part:

    "Time stood still pristine in nature
    Have we elders not savored such bliss"

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  21. Dave KingJanuary 22, 2013 at 3:23 AM

    Well crafted, this. Good strong stanzas.

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  22. Judy RoneyJanuary 22, 2013 at 5:23 AM

    Oh, we have and we still do savor them. :) Beautiful.

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  23. SreejaJanuary 22, 2013 at 7:22 AM

    Beautiful!!

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  24. Kay L. DaviesJanuary 22, 2013 at 6:49 PM

    I also love the last two lines, Hank.

    Hoping you and your family are well...
    K

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  25. Tess KincaidJanuary 24, 2013 at 12:22 PM

    Unashamedly wait for salvation...powerful...grabbed me...

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