Sunday, December 4, 2016

Swept off the ground shocked

                                                                                         Attribution: Guérin Nicolas
Image: A Hot Kiss (here)

Night to discover
Reminiscent of surprise
Swept off the ground shocked
Sudden hug out of the blue
Uncharitable first kiss

For Chev's tanka at Carpe Diem #1085  -  the kiss 
Elizabeth's Creativity Challenge Day 14  -  hug
Mary's at PU's Poetry Pantry #331
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24 comments:

  1. Alex J. CavanaughDecember 4, 2016 at 5:49 AM

    I wish my first kiss had been that hot.

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  2. nashvillecats2December 4, 2016 at 5:55 AM

    What lovely words Hank. I remember my first kiss though many years ago. something that is always etched in one's mind.
    Yvonne.

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  3. colleenDecember 4, 2016 at 6:09 AM

    The uncharitable part surprised me.

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  4. AnonymousDecember 4, 2016 at 6:27 AM

    I remember the shock. I was 13, and my father interrupted. The boy came back the next evening and asked if I'd teach his best friend. That was the uncharitable, lol.

    Elizabeth

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    1. Pat RDecember 7, 2016 at 4:36 PM

      Lol! Young minds, how they work. That's funny. But I just know it wasn't then:)

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  5. AnonymousDecember 4, 2016 at 6:44 AM

    The uncharitable part seemed like a twist..

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  6. TruedessaDecember 4, 2016 at 7:32 AM

    uncharitable - is the kiss unwanted? I love the bird picture.

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  7. brudbergDecember 4, 2016 at 8:49 AM

    The first kiss... I still remember the tingle... when I close my eyes I can feel the warmth of her lips.

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  8. Sumana RoyDecember 4, 2016 at 8:50 AM

    'Uncharitable' pricks...

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  9. CloudiaDecember 4, 2016 at 10:04 AM

    I feel the heat!

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  10. Sherry Blue SkyDecember 4, 2016 at 10:37 AM

    Ha, you reminded me of my first kiss - at the pinnacle moment my mom turned on the porch light and opened the door and we both froze, thinking we had been struck by lightning. I dont think any other kiss ever matched it. LOL.

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  11. Pat HattDecember 4, 2016 at 12:20 PM

    Swept up and hopefully still kissing away

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  12. MaryDecember 4, 2016 at 1:32 PM

    Ha...sometimes 'uncharitable' is the way it was the very first time!! Hopefully, in time it is better.

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  13. SusanDecember 4, 2016 at 2:27 PM

    I liked the hug, but I don't know about the "uncharitable" kiss. I think in the realm of the senses, being startled is mighty scary.

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  14. ZQDecember 4, 2016 at 2:29 PM

    OK I LOVE you. :)

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  15. AnonymousDecember 4, 2016 at 3:54 PM

    Oh yes! Malana. What a teacher

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  16. Wendy BourkeDecember 4, 2016 at 4:25 PM

    This delightful and brought a smile. Thanks Hank.

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  17. Audrey Howitt aka DivaloungerDecember 4, 2016 at 6:28 PM

    I think mine was uncharitable as well--Loved this Hank!

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  18. Rosemary Nissen-WadeDecember 4, 2016 at 10:35 PM

    I took the 'uncharitable' to mean that it was not an act of pity but desire.

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  19. Sanaa RizviDecember 5, 2016 at 6:49 AM

    Such a delightful read ❤️

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  20. Myrna R.December 5, 2016 at 9:15 AM

    You brought back memories of my first kiss - so awkward it really was uncharitable.

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  21. Purba chakrabortyDecember 5, 2016 at 11:50 AM

    This is a lovely poem. Made me smile :)

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  22. JulianDecember 5, 2016 at 12:01 PM

    How the first kiss and relationship can feel uncharitable when dumped for the first time.

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  23. Pat RDecember 7, 2016 at 4:40 PM

    On my first kiss i felt that my tongue stayed hanging out after the kiss. I remember wondering what all the fus was about, lol! A nice write:)

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