Sunday, September 7, 2014

Rush to stake a claim!

                                                                                       Moths: Courtesy of Tess' Mag
Image: Spoiling for a Share (here)

The three of a kind
Found milling around
Bidding for the shine
When homeward bound

Night moths were lost
Some radar confusion
Holding onto a cause
Flailing wings collision

Liken to human failings
On seeing an attraction
Would commence fighting
Selfish intents for a portion

Rush to stake a claim
Be first to grab the spoils
Conflicts became intense
Self-interest came to a boil

For Tess' hosting at Magpie Tales #236
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17 comments:

  1. Maude LynnSeptember 7, 2014 at 9:13 AM

    Well done, Hank! I really like this one.

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  2. Brian MillerSeptember 7, 2014 at 9:47 AM

    i find it so sad
    that thir attraction leads them
    to death...though i guess it is romantic
    as well.

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  3. Sumana RoySeptember 7, 2014 at 11:10 AM

    i like where you took this...nicely done...like humans "they meet their fate...

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  4. Pat HattSeptember 7, 2014 at 12:34 PM

    Attraction isn't always the best thing, have to keep it in check or off with the head

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  5. Holy Ghost WriterSeptember 7, 2014 at 12:45 PM

    We bring trouble on ourselves

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  6. AnonymousSeptember 7, 2014 at 2:19 PM

    I agree with comment above, we do most of the time bring on our own troubles, but there is certainly many out there who also causes trouble out of spite.
    Loved the read Hank.

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  7. Kathe W.September 7, 2014 at 8:04 PM

    suicidal hell bent moths- excellent!

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  8. Vandana SharmaSeptember 7, 2014 at 9:43 PM

    beautifully brought out the comparison with humans, greed takes it all.

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  9. Silent Otto September 8, 2014 at 4:20 AM

    Some sibling moth - rivalry !

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  10. Ginny BrannanSeptember 8, 2014 at 8:09 AM

    Three of a kind indeed. Well captured!

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  11. steveroniSeptember 8, 2014 at 1:17 PM

    Good interpretations!
    (From a book I read parts of every day):
    "Selfishness--self-centeredness! That, we think, is the root of our troubles.."
    Pg 62 "Alcoholics Anonymous"

    I shall think of the moth when that character defect shows itself.
    Thank you.

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  12. 21 WitsSeptember 8, 2014 at 2:53 PM

    Lovely write, I believe moth and man could be the wiser joining forces!

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  13. TruedessaSeptember 8, 2014 at 8:33 PM

    In this case it would be a fatal attraction..rather sad when it is all is gone in a flash of light..nicely woven Hank..

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  14. Tess KincaidSeptember 10, 2014 at 11:20 AM

    I like this one Hank...nice rhyming pattern...had to read it out loud for full effect...

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  15. AnonymousSeptember 10, 2014 at 3:04 PM

    Nice pattern! I also like that idea of rivalry was brought in.

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  16. AnonymousSeptember 10, 2014 at 10:55 PM

    Very, very good take. Mine wasn't all that different. Love and Light, S

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  17. Susan AndersonSeptember 20, 2014 at 8:40 AM

    I enjoyed your perspective here…especially the sense of competition you introduced.

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