Attribution: Jen from Blog it or Lose it
Image: Photo prompt above courtesy
of Georgia at Mindlovemisery
of Georgia at Mindlovemisery
A shadorma comprises six non-rhyming lines
and the syllable pattern is 3-5-3-3-7-5.
Clouds gather
Menacingly dark
Extending
way beyond
Expected cold showers to
lash the whole night through
Hey, taxi!
Never seem to hear
If one can
beat the rain
better alternative is
home snugly in bed
Have light snacks
then proceed straight home
Night life are
affected
Activities virtually
dead, at a standstill
Activities virtually
dead, at a standstill
Note: Memories of days gone by of rushing home
from work amid heavy showers on some days
For Georgia's hosting at Mindlovemisery Menagerie
#10 with photo prompt where we are to write on memories
and shared with d'Verse OpenLinkNight
#10 with photo prompt where we are to write on memories
and shared with d'Verse OpenLinkNight
rains.................love them
ReplyDeleteGreat take on this photo ...enjoyed this.
ReplyDeletethe rains can be like tossing cold water on the fire of the night life....
ReplyDeleteYeah in bed is the better place to be, especially when it is a cold rain
ReplyDeleteoh heck.. i think you're really having heavy, heavy rains where you are... i've been in some on my bike... and looked like a wet cat when finally reaching home...oy
ReplyDeleteAh yes heavy rains are often worse tgan snow. Nice Shadorma gor this prompt. Oliana
ReplyDeleteHeavy rains are not pleasant to get stuck in
ReplyDeleteI feel this one, Hank!
ReplyDeleteOnce, back from school I was caught in heavy rain. Riding a bike then..and right after that fallen sick. And the worse thing was it was just before examination.
ReplyDeleteNicely written, Hank. :)
Ohh i could really relate to this poem! I love how you depict the brewing storm, the darkening skies, the heavy clouds... I could see it all. Rain affects so much in our lives!
ReplyDeleteI love the menacing dark and the whips of wind--love this form and what you have done with it Hank!
ReplyDeleteBest to stay home before those clouds pour ~ I hate being stuck somewhere and having to call the taxi ~ Good to see you Hank ~
ReplyDeleteI love the rain but dare not wish for it. We had bad flooding in this area last year, and this year there are threats of mudslides in the higher elevations.
ReplyDeleteMy Shadorma is here.
http://poetryofthenetherworld.blogspot.com/2014/05/shadorma-shadow-memories.html
Lash the whole night through calls for snuggly in bed, as you said.
ReplyDeleteI always prefer being snugly at home when it's storming! Good one, Hank!
ReplyDeleteHank, the best part of a heavy rain is getting back to a nice, warm, dry place. Well done.
ReplyDeletePamela
Hank, a lot of poets use forms such as the shadorma and find themselves shoehorning in words; they sound clunky. This flowed as naturally as the incoming storm itself. I love a loud thunderstorm if I'm indoors, but if there is no lightning, I walk barefoot in the grass. The cloud formation looks just like what we had here last week! Nice to read you... thanks for your comment on AIDS poem. Love, Amelita
ReplyDeleteI would rather be dry and cosy than out in the storm.
ReplyDeleteTaxis, the same the world over.
ReplyDeleteWhat a lovely shadorma story you caught the aura of the photograph perfectly! Thanks for participating!
ReplyDeleteI am sure your heavy showers are far worse than ours. Always good to be home and cosy than drenched. I am sure you really felt thou had to be home.
ReplyDeleteoh, I love driving home in the rain - it's like an invitation to snuggle up once there. I really enjoyed the structure of your poem, too. A new form for me. Thank you. - Vivienne, of OneVoicePoetry.
ReplyDeleteAh, the taxis...you show a variety of impressions here, all flowing so naturally from the prompt...nice job.
ReplyDeleteSteve K.
I hadn't heard of this form before - I can imagine having great fun with it! I enjoyed the different consequences of rain in each of your stanzas, I had many pictures in my head as I read. The cities are quieter when the rains come - either everyone is at home or in the bars!
ReplyDeleteYup, we've all been there and that powerlessness can be quite nice, given the sanctuary we can offer ourselves... Nicely done... Regards Scott www.scotthastie.com
ReplyDeleteWell, the best place to be when it is storming is at home. We had a terrible storm Friday night I just stayed inside and watched a bit of TV.
ReplyDeletethis was concise and tight, nice
ReplyDeleteVery evocative! Nights here will be getting like that soon.
ReplyDeleteLove your take, Hank.
ReplyDeleteNever knew there was such a thing as light snacks.... I do know rain is a pain.
ReplyDeleteHow's life, Hank the Poetry Tank?