Image: A Hawthorn Hedge
A hedge apparently considered a symbol of death as its wood was used for funeral pyres
Source: Wikimedia Commons (here)
One is to write a haiku distilled from another poem. The
poem by Genji is in italics.
It told a story of a lady who died purely as a result of
hatred by another woman
jealous of her
The evening sky
itself
becomes something
to cherish
when I gaze at it,
seeing in one of
the clouds
the smoke from her
funeral pyre - poem by Genji
Untimely demise
Not through any fault of hers
Killed by pure hatred
Tears like beads falling
Feelings of regret unmasked
For someone so dear
Written for Chev's Carpe Diem's Distillation #2,
Shared with Kerry's hosting at Real Toad's Open Link Monday
Written for Chev's Carpe Diem's Distillation #2,
Shared with Kerry's hosting at Real Toad's Open Link Monday
what's frightening is how common such pure hatred nowadays is.
ReplyDeleteKilled by pure hatred
ReplyDeletethat was very sad line..
I really liked the distilled Haiku.. original was great too
What a sad story and I like both poems--yours and the original. Thanks for visiting my blog.
ReplyDeleteGreat poem. It's so sad to think someone might die from another person's hatred.
ReplyDeleteKilled by pure hatred....
ReplyDeleteA treat Hank what a gorgeous distillation of haiku from the poem by Genji. Well done.
ReplyDeleteKilled in such a way, sad indeed such a thing goes that far at any bay
ReplyDeletethe feeling of the beeds...
ReplyDeletekilled by pure hatred says enough, for sure...
sad that hate can do such things
ReplyDeleteI particularly like your second one, Hank.
ReplyDeleteSuperb writing. Quite masterful, the new versions.
ReplyDeleteThat is really well done. Hatred ruins so many things.
ReplyDeleteThis is a very interesting premise for a poem.
ReplyDeleteHank, I liked your take on the Genji poem. And hatred doesn't only kill others - it kills the one who holds it, bit by bit. When one rejects love for hatred, it's going to end up badly for the person... Peace, Amy
ReplyDeleteThat's really good!
ReplyDeleteFascinating take on the prompt-loved the line,"Feelings of regret unmasked"-makes one hopeful that the hater's heart underwent a change for the better:-)
ReplyDeletei did not know about the pyre wood - thanks!
ReplyDeletetears falling like beads...love this line as your distillation offering. great!