Friday, June 12, 2015

it leaves one breathless

                                                                                                   Attribution:  ZCU
Image: A descendant of Newton's apple tree, planted in the
Botanical Gardens, the University of Tokyo, Japan (here)

From deep in the spring
clear reflections rise to meet
falling plum petals                       (Southard)
it leaves one breathless to see
them float gracefully to earth      (Hank)

From deep in the spring
clear reflections rise to meet
falling plum petals                       (Southard)
luckily not an apple
that it could create history           (Hank)

For Chev's CARPE DIEM Tan Renga
Challenge #89 with Southard

9 comments:

  1. To think if it could do something as much as newton's did.

    ReplyDelete
  2. Plum blossoms are so significant in Japanese culture--that subtle beauty and fragrance, like your poem.

    ReplyDelete
  3. This was just supberb Hank. Werll done.
    Yvonne

    ReplyDelete
  4. Beautifully done








    ALOHA from Honolulu,
    ComfortSpiral
    =^..^=

    ReplyDelete
  5. Liked both your endings ... but the second made me smile! Good go Hank! Bastet

    ReplyDelete
  6. Lovely response! I like them both :-)

    ReplyDelete