Attribution: Edmund Sullivan
Image: Gathering of Elders (here)
A Sentiments
unraveled that of the old
A Eying
what transpired in a small bowl
B Men of
the desert meeting in a tent
A Seeking
to verify what they were told
B Sensing
travels but folded in a bent
B Infirmed
and the sick not considered spent
C Dreams
of a young lover padded to form
B To
long and to hold a cup full of wine
C Sense
of being merry in part with songs
C Presence
of camels were not out of turn
D Discarded
feel simmering in the air
C Daring
to pitch for some likely reforms
D Let
alone sleeping lion in their lair
D Discussions
let it seem to be most fair
E Pick
the best brains forever be grateful
D Seek the truth the outcome for those who dare
Note: The 10-syllable count is maintained throughout
Note: The 10-syllable count is maintained throughout
smiles. ah if only the elders were always the most wise eh?
ReplyDeleteits not a role to be taken lightly...some nice slant and b rhymes in this
as well hank.
Lion in the lair - nice!
ReplyDeleteLike the idea of seeking the truth outcome. If the truth is attained that is important!
ReplyDeleteI wish elders from everywhere could simply meet and find a truth we could all agree upon. It seems this will only be a dream, or a poem.
ReplyDeletereally dug the last stanza; truth only comes to those who dare seek...
ReplyDeleteHank,
ReplyDeleteNice job on the form..seeking truth in matters with care..sleeping lions beware..
Those lions can sure strike, but the truth shall come to light
ReplyDeleteI think the wisdom from elders discussing might prevent the lion of rashness could be kept at bay.. Sometimes all it takes is to sit by a campfire talking.
ReplyDeletewow - you really made this tight !
ReplyDeletethere is wisdom when experienced people gather to discuss things... i wish some politicians had such a group of elders around...
ReplyDeleteI like the idea of the elders meeting to find out the truth outcome ~ You have followed the form faithfully Hank ~ Cheers ~
ReplyDeletewell you completed the whole package here... nice job... i almost felt bad listening in
ReplyDeleteInfirmed and the sick not considered spent... Yes, our elders often possess wisdom that we should listen to, instead of assuming that because they're old, they have ceased to have anything to say...
ReplyDeleteLiking your subject matter and form. Good reading here.
ReplyDeleteHello I am a new follower Cassandra, I thought this an outstanding subject and a privilege to read.
ReplyDeleteyes...truth needs daring and wisdom...very well written Hank...
ReplyDeleteCool use of the form - Interesting subject too. Making decisions about women - same story still going on! Thanks.
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