Tuesday, November 5, 2013

Salvation fulfilled

                                                                                               Attribution: I EIC
Image  Awareness
Source: Wikimedia Commons (here)

life completes circle
at the end of the journey
death draws the last line      -    Sara McNulty
Repent mere mortals for a
second chance never did come

life completes circle
at the end of the journey
death draws the last line       -    Sara McNulty
awareness likely option
towards salvation fulfilled

Written for Chev's CARPE DIEM Tan Renga Month #5 with Sara's
life completes circle and Grace's hosting at d'Verse OpenLinkNight Week 121

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20 comments:

  1. ClaudiaNovember 5, 2013 at 8:45 AM

    i always hope that i'm well prepared when life completes the circle and death draws the last line...there are days i think it would be wonderful to be home finally..

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  2. Wabi SabiNovember 5, 2013 at 8:46 AM

    The question of eternity looms, doesn't it?

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  3. Brian MillerNovember 5, 2013 at 8:49 AM

    i like what you added to the second one...the awareness or consciousness of death propelling us to live, hopefully

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  4. Reading PleasureNovember 5, 2013 at 8:50 AM

    Brilliant. I know I am prepared!

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  5. Gillena CoxNovember 5, 2013 at 9:05 AM

    prefer the second one, extended into ashift of hope


    much love...

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  6. Pat HattNovember 5, 2013 at 11:39 AM

    Have to be aware as at some point we'll all get there

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  7. brudbergNovember 5, 2013 at 12:47 PM

    Wonderful contrast created.. the first one is my favourite...

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  8. ChèvrefeuilleNovember 5, 2013 at 1:07 PM

    Wonderful ... both are so in balance with the first stanza ... great!

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  9. Magical Mystical TeacherNovember 5, 2013 at 3:09 PM

    Oh, those elusive second chances!

    Final Act of Defiance

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  10. AnonymousNovember 5, 2013 at 4:12 PM

    Marvelous creation. I love it!

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  11. TruedessaNovember 5, 2013 at 6:03 PM

    Life's complete circle where death draws the last line..very true words my friend.

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  12. CloudiaNovember 5, 2013 at 6:22 PM

    circle game, round and round


    ALOHA from Honolulu
    Comfort Spiral
    =^..^= <3
    > < } } ( ° >
    > < 3 3 3 ( ' >

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  13. EllaNovember 5, 2013 at 10:01 PM

    Yes, the circle continues...I like drawing the line..we all must march to this tune!

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  14. AnonymousNovember 6, 2013 at 1:00 AM

    It doesn't seem like you need a second chance to me.

    as we were before our birth

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  15. Holy Ghost WriterNovember 6, 2013 at 3:30 AM

    Prepared for when it comes

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  16. SunNovember 6, 2013 at 5:41 AM

    both your offering makes for a good meditation session - thank you!

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  17. Sharp Little PencilNovember 6, 2013 at 1:07 PM

    Hank, your "comments" on Sara's poem couple well with your comments on my peace poem. Salvation while there is war? No way. It's up to all of us.

    This is a combination of two poets, both capable of grace and insight. Thanks so much, Hank. Peace, Amelita

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  18. VictoriaNovember 6, 2013 at 9:20 PM

    Enjoyed how you worked these together. And, yes. I agree that awareness is where we find wholeness.

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  19. Mystic_MomNovember 7, 2013 at 11:31 AM

    Well done.

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  20. AnonymousNovember 11, 2013 at 8:38 PM

    Love your endings, particularly the first one!

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