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chanting and
humming
gongs immerse the
green valley
full of sanctioned bliss
chanting and
humming
gongs immerse the
green valley
in celebration
chanting and
humming
gongs immerse the
green valley
with grand
musicals
Chev's CARPE DIEM challenge #3 to complete a haiku with the 3rd line of 5 syllables
Chev's CARPE DIEM challenge #3 to complete a haiku with the 3rd line of 5 syllables
And sure have a fun time with their chime
ReplyDeleteIt sounds nicely rythmic but I wonder what it describes - hpw ignorant.
ReplyDeleteall 3 were perfect...with that ahhh moment...
ReplyDeleteCan I have some of that Bliss?
ReplyDeleteNicely done! I like how you let line one be the fragment and you allowed the 2nd line to be your phrase. I too found the natural break in this haiku to be at the end of line one.
ReplyDeleteAbsolutely Lolly! In fact reading out loud has more impact. Read the first line and pause for the break. Then read the second and third without a break.It enhances the appreciation. Thanks for emphasizing it Ma'am!
DeleteHank
I really like the line "in celebration". Good job.
ReplyDeleteGood practice for the haiku, Hank. You did good in the Tankas below too.
ReplyDeleteI use Tanka when a haiku or Senyru won't quite say what I want to say. It adds two more lines.
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i would def love to be able to hear them...i find their moans to be quite peaceful....
ReplyDeleteOh, for that music!
ReplyDeleteI like these completed haiku ... every haiku has become a gem ...
ReplyDelete3 lovely 3rd lines, espec. the musicals...
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