Friday, February 15, 2013

Stood Up

How come you are dressed up this way
I would have to for him
But the other girls have all gone
That was some time ago!

Well...
I do not know
I…
I just cannot think now!

He is supposed to pick you up?
Yes, like other freshies
Well, these seniors are just hustlers
There goes your Valentine!

Note: 1. Freshies often got stood up by seniors in College for dances earlier arranged. Rather ungentlemanly but these things happened
Note: 2  Shay challenged all Toads “to write a poem using iambs, of 3 stanzas of four lines each. The first and third stanzas will have four lines with syllable counts of 8,6,8 and 6. The second stanza will have a syllable count of 1,4,1,6."

Written for Shay aka Fireblossom's hosting at Real Toads to write using iambs (didn't conform to the stresses but I'm only sure of the syllable count)

24 comments:

  1. A slice of a teenager's life, Hank. Nicely done.

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  2. Ah getting stood up...not a fun thing haha. Great writing Hank as always.

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  3. Yeah think we all learn that along the way, either through watching or actually living it, part of life I suppose, not fun.

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  4. Way to go, Hank! I didnt manage to write exactly to the form. Just an approximation. You worked the form so well.

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  5. A timely glimpse A too often common hurt. Well done with the form, Hank!

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  6. Good writing with the form Hank. And yes an all too common hurt here. What jerks.

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  7. That's just not right! However, speaking as the youngest in my original family by nine years, being younger does finally come around in one's favor! Thanks for doing the challenge!

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  8. Neat to incorporate the dialogue of the let down, parent (?) to child. This paints a sad picture and leaves it nicely unresolved.

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  9. pretty much the same happened at our colleges as well...guess we are not that much different around the world...

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  10. thanks so much for the explanation, made the poem even more wonderful

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  11. i went through those times too... and hearing them now from my siblings and their kids... thanks for reminding me of these stories...

    Pareng JJ

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  12. !!! that is horrendous! The poor girl.

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  13. Oh, I remember those days! And those hurts last a long time. Nice write, Hank.

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  14. Being stood up..that really hurts. Nice capture of a traumatic event.

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  15. I learned something of American protocol here. Thank you. Sorry for the girl being stood up!

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  16. I was never stood up, but I have had my heart broken. Hurts either way.

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  17. It's never nice to be stood up - but I like the way you fit your sad Valentine's story to the form.

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  18. Heaping 'BOOS' on all seniors who dupe freshies! Great poem.

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  19. like a part of every teenager story and then you sulk around.... later, well cycle
    e starts again :P

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  20. In one form or another we've all been there. Know what you mean! Great - and surprising - take on the prompt.

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  21. Great work on the form ~ Not fun to do as we ladies go to great lengths to dress up ~

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  22. You made me feel all parental again! Glad I am done with the mom-of-teens phase!!

    http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2013/02/17/runners/

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