Attribution: Bob Jenkins
Image: Yellow Brick Road (here)
The paradelle is a 4-stanza poem, where each stanza consists of 6 lines.
Image: Yellow Brick Road (here)
The paradelle is a 4-stanza poem, where each stanza consists of 6 lines.
For the first 3
stanzas, the 1st and 2nd lines should be the same;
the 3rd and 4th lines should
also be the same; and the 5th and 6th
lines should be composed of all the words
from the 1st and 3rd lines
and only the words from the 1st and 3rd lines.
The final stanza
should be composed of all the words in the 5th and
6th lines of the first three
stanzas and only the words from the 5th
and 6th lines of the first three
stanzas - Brian
going for a
short summer’s holiday
going for a short summer’s holiday
it had been a hard day’s night working late
it had been a hard day’s night working late
a short summer’s holiday it had been
going for a hard day’s night working late
but I left my heart in San Francisco
but I left my heart in San Francisco
beautiful flower
children were on high then
beautiful flower children were on high then
my heart in San Francisco on high but
flower children were beautiful then I left
by the time I got to Phoenix she was gone
by the time I got to Phoenix she was gone
then I took the Old Yellow road alone
then I took the Old Yellow road alone
she was gone by the Old Yellow road
I got to Phoenix I then took time alone
my heart in San Francisco on high but
a short summer’s holiday it had been
she was gone by the Old Yellow road
going for a hard day’s night working late
I got to Phoenix I then took time alone
flower children were beautiful then I left
Note: Hank was at a loss starting out. Remembering
some song titles and lyrics saved the day. Hopefully
this is acceptable as all rules are adhered to
For Brian's hosting at d' Verse MTB where one is
challenged to try composing a - paradelle
it is more than acceptible...you made it work..i got a few of the song titles but it does not overwhelm it...you tell a compelling story of following her...your 5/6 lines on the first 3 stanzas i thought came out real well considering the form...well played sir.
ReplyDeleteThanks Brian, you did it all for us! Going around in circles trying but it was fun
DeleteHank
Nice job indeed, made it work and a good story to boot
ReplyDeleteI could NEVER do that! Wow
ReplyDeleteALOHA from Honolulu
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Good job, Hank. I enjoyed the references to old songs.....
ReplyDeleteExcellent Hank. I think this form is better suited to song than spoken poetry actually. In song the repetition works I think. The song titles fit well.
ReplyDeleteso well done Hank...i love the beautifully sad feel to it...
ReplyDeleteIf the one you are searching for eludes you, I suppose you will take time alone. Nice take on the prompt.
ReplyDeleteWhat a great idea to use the song lines. This one really works!
ReplyDeleteGood one Hank.Makes as much sense as all the ones I have read. Great fun play with words.
ReplyDeleteAh, the best of songs :D
ReplyDeleteNice use of the form Hank.
ReplyDelete... it made it's own song
ReplyDeleteWell, you did make it flow like a song in addition to using song titles. Well done.
ReplyDeleteHas a nice song feeling to it
ReplyDeleteI like the idea you came up for this, Hank. Song titles worked amazingly well for the paradelle form.
ReplyDeleteWow. You wrote something so nice out of song titles and in spite of the restrictions imposed by the paradelle. This was great Hank. I really liked it.
ReplyDeleteGreat way to combine it with found poetry with the titles of song too... Love the heart on high.
ReplyDeleteSmiles. You made it there years before I did.
ReplyDeleteoh...quite acceptable. you delivered quite an enjoyable story...though a touch sad...the form flows nicely.
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