Tuesday, July 8, 2014

Can Providence hear out plea! - a Tanka

                                                                                     Attribution:  High Contrast
Image: Rudbeckia Faded through Summer Heat (here)

Note: Tanka is a short Japanese poetry
form with a 5-7-5-7-7 syllable pattern

When heat of summer
is allowed its way clinging
Autumn bids its time
but delay can impact on
those long suffering patients

Dryness worsens coughs
of those afflicted but plea
to Providence can
result in smooth transition
as it had always happened?

Note: Inspired by Shiki  who happened
to be a long suffering TB patient

For Chev's CARPE DIEM's G-Writer #6   -  Jen's on Shiki

7 comments:

  1. Beautifully penned tanka ... though so very sad.

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  2. The clinging of the heat can sure make one feel beat

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  3. I feel dried out and withered and the day hasn't hit yet.
    Strong words here Hank

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  4. made me think of the wild west...where people moved to particular areas so that the dryness would help their symptoms.....

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  5. Everything hinges on "always," doesn't it, Hank?

    Peering Under the Bean Leaves

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  6. Awesome Hank ... I wast aware of you being such a great tanka-poet ... really nicely composed and so in tune with the suffering of Shiki. Thank you!

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