Thursday, June 13, 2013

A Rondelet

                                                                        Attribution: Christof Berger
Image: The Glacier Perito Moreno, Argentina
Source: Wikimedia Commons (here)

Go blaze the trail
The young are bent on getting there
Go blaze the trail
No stopping when young hearts declare
Struck with a challenge seems all fair
Yes! It is more than just a dare
Go blaze the trail

Go blaze the trail
Go blast your way for all you care
Go blaze the trail
Sure! Fault the saying ‘it is there!’
Just go provoke a tiger’s lair
Feeling great as you are aware
Go blaze the trail

Note: I've chosen to make a double so I can continue dancing the 
tune twice instead of stopping at 7 lines.

Written for Tony’s hosting at d’Verse Forms For All  -  a rondelet
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19 comments:

  1. Brian MillerJune 13, 2013 at 6:17 PM

    ha. might want to watch poking that tiger too hard...he's got claws...but i def like the challenge to go blaze that trail...well done to form hank...

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  2. SusanJune 13, 2013 at 6:48 PM

    In the first "go blaze the trail" seemed very encouraging, but then in the second the same phrase sounded more like the narrator was abandoning them to their own foolishness. Sounds like my Dad.

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  3. MaryJune 13, 2013 at 6:59 PM

    Indeed each generation of young has to blaze their own trail in their own way!!

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  4. Rosemary Nissen-WadeJune 13, 2013 at 10:54 PM

    It's full of vigour and a sense of derring-do!

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  5. vivinfranceJune 13, 2013 at 11:50 PM

    I particularly love the refrain in these - it moves the poem forward each time.

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  6. AnonymousJune 14, 2013 at 12:05 AM

    Another great poem in response to the prompt; the refrain is brilliant and gives a very active feel to the poem, Hank. Strictly speaking line 4 of each stanza should rhyme with the refrain, but forms are made to be adapted to our needs, not vice versa.

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  7. CloudiaJune 14, 2013 at 1:02 AM

    Thoughtful


    ALOHA from Honolulu
    Comfort Spiral
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  8. TCPCJune 14, 2013 at 2:07 AM

    oh wow! the refrain works wonderfully here. Push push push!!! :)

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  9. brudbergJune 14, 2013 at 2:52 AM

    Wonderful.. It made want to get my boots and go walking... :-)

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  10. Dave KingJune 14, 2013 at 4:42 AM

    Superb. The whole thing works wonderfully.

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  11. ScarletJune 14, 2013 at 5:42 AM

    Good work on the double rondolet Hank ~

    The refrain - Go blaze the trail - gives it a nice beat ~

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  12. Holy Ghost WriterJune 14, 2013 at 6:04 AM

    a trail we all want to go on at some point or another

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  13. Pat HattJune 14, 2013 at 7:57 AM

    Such a trail may end up in a fail or you just never know, unless you give it a go

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  14. ninotazizJune 14, 2013 at 11:02 AM

    I like the fact that you enjoyed it so much, you doubled it up!

    This was so upbeat - truly enjoyable!

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  15. ClaudiaJune 14, 2013 at 12:47 PM

    the blaze the trail refrain has something of a clarion call..well done hank

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  16. Vanessa Victoria KilmerJune 14, 2013 at 2:04 PM

    A great call to the wilds of our hearts.

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  17. kelvin s.m.June 14, 2013 at 5:17 PM

    ...double treat... double fun... you rock Hank... aww... smiles... it seems there's no difficult form at your lair... adorable ability...

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  18. AnonymousJune 14, 2013 at 8:17 PM

    Very nice! It is like the captain's exhortation before a great fight. :-)

    ~Imelda

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  19. SreejaJune 14, 2013 at 8:37 PM

    Nice and delightful! I like the line "go blaze the trail." Smiles...

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