Wednesday, January 29, 2020

when come early summer

                                                                                                   Author: Eli Solidum
Image: A Colorful bird Chirping Away (here)

the 11 of 12 given words:
why come summer, lovely birds 
where tap lips vanished lads tonight

why, when come early summer
songs permeate the air so lovely
not the dawn chorus of spring any more
but solitary birds individually
in attracting a mate and making a show
in defense of its chosen territory

where feet are tapped and lips in noisy chatter
inhibitions vanished not unlike lads who boast
of their first success as a tea-dance dazzler
with a showy exhibition of their latest moves

great leg-work with graceful dancing
very much like a boxer in time to the tune
tonight is the night to dream big dreams!
like the wise owl crying for the moon

MMT's The Whirligig #251
Lillian's at d'Verse's Tuesday Poetics - dreams


  1. I love the way you've worked with the words from the other prompt you's truly a beautiful scene. At first I didn't see how this related at all to my prompt about a it a second time to make sure I was not missing something .... and then I finally saw it. A line added at the end that somehow stops the reader and adds the idea of dreaming big....don't quite see how it's related to the rest of the poem...but that's okay. I love the illustration and the title.

  2. Nice description: "making a show
    in defense of its chosen territory"

  3. Sure know how to play the tune in tune and dance to the beat

  4. I like the ending Hank, now is the time to dream big.

  5. I loved this Hank. thinking of spring and summer brings me hope.


  6. Some wonderfully images you have written here

  7. This is a lovely poem of the mating and hormones rising... very much the same in birds and humans.