Image: A Sad Outcome (here)
Sunday Whirl's 12 given words:
beam born carry mean nothing pick
post poor shake string trigger sea
the prose
beaming with laughter but not anymore
born to carry the burden of choice of a mean
father and that of a good-for-nothing beau
to pick the pieces and be first past the post
is a tall order a poor option to say the least
how to shake off the strings of conscience
lest it triggers off a sea of retributions?
the haiku
sins of the father
left in the lurch facing the
music all alone
music all alone
Clarification: Apologies to Toni
The above meets the conditions of 3 tight paras and a haiku for a Haibun
but not the conditions of # (2) Containing kigo and kireji words (3) Must
be true (4) Must have actually happened to you.
Brenda's Sunday Whirl Wordle #309
Nekneeraj's at MLMM's Photo Challenge #175
Toni's at d'Verse Haibun Monday - free for all
Your haiku is perfect! It both reflects the allusions of the prose, and carries the weight of the narrative in condensed form. Great writing!
ReplyDeleteOh my. A rose grown in darkness with bitter water, Well done, Hank.
ReplyDeleteSuch a sad tale. You relay the pathos well.
ReplyDeleteThis is so sad...the prose section reads like a beautiful poem too. A good one Hank.
ReplyDeleteA sad and a thought provoking verse Hank.
ReplyDeleteYvonne.
Being alone undermines one's confidence.
ReplyDeleteAlone can sure bring on thoughts that may not play
ReplyDeleteWonderful writing. But regarding the haibun, I have to ask if this was true and if it happened to you? The poem at the end condenses the prose portion perfectly.
ReplyDeleteApologies, Toni Ma'am,missed that. Adding in the clarification
DeleteHank
How very sad.
ReplyDeleteSometimes, one wonders what she has done to have such a fate.
Beautifully described...ah the awkwardness, bumping noses...never will I forget that first kiss :) Cheryl-Lynn
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