Sunday, September 13, 2015

skillfully she shored up her lines of defense

                                                                             Attribution: Sumeet Maghe
Image: A Lioness in the Gir Forest (here)

Sunday Whirl given words:
face shore lines down ripe far itself 
drizzle heart birth sprout silhouette

given to the provocation of having
to face the inevitable was damning enough
skillfully she shored up her lines of defense

down to a trickle but ripe for a change
a far cry from the loss of resolve
in trying to assess the issue itself

 a sense of loss persisted akin to standing
in a drizzle cold in the heart still not
nearer to getting a solution

birth of an idea to sprout out suddenly
seemed remote and was turning out to be a joke
not even as a silhouette in the distance

too much to struggle for
emotionally her patience was wearing thin
she decided to just dump him!

Brenda's hosting at Sunday Whirl Wordle #216 and
Mary's at PU's Poetry Pantry # 269
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28 comments:

  1. SuyashJSeptember 13, 2015 at 12:39 AM

    haha well , i guess that's all she could've done

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  2. brudbergSeptember 13, 2015 at 12:48 AM

    I guess patience finally wears thin.

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  3. Jae RoseSeptember 13, 2015 at 2:17 AM

    The last line is perfect Hank - i wondered where the metaphor was leading - wise choice on her part maybe?

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  4. Old EggSeptember 13, 2015 at 4:05 AM

    Yes, lionesses are the boss and in control.

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  5. Marcoantonio Arellano (Nene)September 13, 2015 at 5:32 AM

    wow, a predictable ending. i mean in regards to the theme

    well penned

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  6. MarySeptember 13, 2015 at 5:43 AM

    Very clever, Hank. As I began reading I thought 'animal' and as I came to the ending I realized ....... well, let's say I enjoyed the twist your ending took.

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  7. Sanaa RizviSeptember 13, 2015 at 5:49 AM

    The closing lines just blew me away..! What an incredible write :D

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  8. Pat HattSeptember 13, 2015 at 5:58 AM

    When in control the power to dump sure comes up haha

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  9. Sumana RoySeptember 13, 2015 at 6:01 AM

    good at last she resolved...

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  10. Magaly GuerreroSeptember 13, 2015 at 6:27 AM

    One can only take so much. Thank goodness for the boot...

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  11. Holy Ghost WriterSeptember 13, 2015 at 6:53 AM

    The best course of action is to dump them when it gets too nerve racking

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  12. TruedessaSeptember 13, 2015 at 7:15 AM

    ha - patience can only last for so long, the question is how long must one wait before moving on?

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  13. MiskySeptember 13, 2015 at 7:37 AM

    I love a surprise ending. :)

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  14. Blue GrumpsterSeptember 13, 2015 at 8:09 AM

    Emotionally her patience was wearing thin... I reckon you have met my wife? Oh wait, let me read that surprise ending again...

    Oh I hope not.

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  15. Keith's ramblingsSeptember 13, 2015 at 8:48 AM

    Good for her - she got rid of her 'mane' man!

    My Sunday Whirl is called Anguish

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  16. the last ember eyeSeptember 13, 2015 at 9:26 AM

    Ha! Perfect ending. :)

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  17. nashvillecats2September 13, 2015 at 9:36 AM

    They say "Patience is a virtue". this proved that point.
    Well written Hank.
    Yvonne.

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  18. SusanSeptember 13, 2015 at 10:41 AM

    Sometimes the excuses we make to hold on aren't worth it--we're already gone.

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  19. Sherry Blue SkySeptember 13, 2015 at 11:05 AM

    Cool twist at the end, it sounded much too exhausting to do anything else. Good one, Hank!

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  20. Donna@LivingFromHappinessSeptember 13, 2015 at 1:35 PM

    'too much to struggle for
    emotionally her patience was wearing thin
    she decided to just dump him!'

    Been there...much easier in the end...saves our hearts and souls and minds....

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  21. AnonymousSeptember 13, 2015 at 3:20 PM

    I wonder if it is pride or wisdom that finally allows us to let go.

    Elizabeth

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  22. Alex J. CavanaughSeptember 13, 2015 at 4:19 PM

    Dump him? The King of the Beasts will be surprised.

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  23. Wendy BourkeSeptember 13, 2015 at 5:08 PM

    Ha! Very cool. I guess even lionesses have their limits. I enjoyed this!

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  24. Brother OllieSeptember 14, 2015 at 3:06 AM

    Great piece! From the title to the last line!

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  25. Rosemary Nissen-WadeSeptember 14, 2015 at 7:05 AM

    Ha ha, great finish!

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  26. J.N.T.September 14, 2015 at 8:56 AM

    i can tell it's so easy but then again one has sympathy and compassion for a broken heart. loved it!!

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  27. Gen Giggles September 14, 2015 at 9:08 AM

    Good call if he's just dicking around.

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