Sunday, September 20, 2015

Partial to pretenses at play - Kyrielle

                                                                                               Attribution: John Fowler
Image: : Water Mill, an 1892 wooden powerhouse
located above the Crystal River in Colorado (here)

A little yearning unfulfilled
Pushed for hearing of a quick deal
Sought an injunction in one way
Hoping to get it any day

A rethink to enjoy success
With dreams of extending the best
Create a system without delay
Hoping to get it any day

Sound direction set to unfurl
A call to announce brave new world
Partial to pretenses at play
Hoping to get it any day

So be it, an idea floating
On lots of options existing
Bent to surprise so just gangway
Hoping to get it any day

Note: A Kyrielle is made up of 4 stanzas with
four lines each having eight syllables. The refrain
is from the fourth line of the first stanza

For Mary's hosting at PU's
Poetry Pantry #270

20 comments:

  1. Nice title, all the P consonant beginning sounds make it sing a bit.
    It seems to be about business, but I read it as how an idea takes
    shape and gains a life of its own. Sometimes we do need to get
    out of the way of the idea for it to really take off.

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  2. What a thoughtful poem - perhaps hoping to get things is better than having everything we think we desire - if that were the case we would have nothing to strive for..

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  3. i like the slant rhyme in every stanza and also the refrain...nice form and content...

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  4. The hope can sure keep one going to try and get things

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  5. Yes, we do hope to have those yearnings fulfilled! When the ideas float, the options present themselves, and hopefully the dreams will come to pass! Always good to see you on Sunday, Hank!

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  6. If we have no hopes or dreams life would get pretty dull

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  7. What a very cool title, and you executed the form wonderfully.

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  8. lives of our hopes and dreams are so diverse.

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  9. Finely constructed poem, the symmetry, sounds and refrain reinforce a balance of options at play. This voice seems to be tending toward a better world, and yet needs a push to make the choice. I fear that's the hang-up rather than the "gangway" of things today--like caring for the planet. But--as is your poem-- remain hopeful,

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  10. beautiful picture and lovely form, well executed, hank.

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  11. I find this to be a very elegant and difficult form.. you have carried it out so magnificently :D

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  12. I have discovered another form today. Sounds to me like someone is exploring options and unfulfilled dreams. I think with a little push he might find his way.

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  13. I think I've told you before how much I admire how you write in forms that seem so difficult. You did a great job here. I like the light feeling of the poem. Enjoyed it much Hank.

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  14. You poetry always rewards my reading


    ALOHA
    ComfortSpiral
    =^..^=

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  15. I was intrigued by the title and loved how these lines played a melody...beautiful!

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  16. It is always great to learn of new verse forms. However I was mesmerized by the structure on the other side of the falls. You can check it out, I'll stay here!

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  17. Excellent writing, love the form and the poem has optimistic, inspiring feel!

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  18. There are lots of reasons to be optimistic, one of them is by reading this poem. Striving for perfection or for the best is always our motivating factor. Thanks for this Hank

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  19. Wonderful optimisitc poem Hank, enjoyed the read.
    Yvonne.

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  20. Great use of the photo to emphasize the poem.

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