Image: Autumn Leaves (here)
"Soliloquy No Renga" (a 10-stanza renga)
1.There is an opening verse, a hokku and a closing verse an ageku.
There has to be a link or an association back to this hokku from the ageku - Chev
2. In each stanza there are pairs of homophones
the hokku
riversong
wind blown from autumn trees
a stream of gold
- © Jane Reichhold
leaves floating way down weighed by
lightness but of gravity
air of likely prideto stake a claim of power
heir to Mother Earth
central to lang of the Scots
bathing length of forest floor
bare of intentions
likely to bear some pressure
meeting it head-on
better to be prepared where
calm persons wear wily smiles
plain thoughts putting brakes
break the silence of warm nights
rise to even plane
four in peaceful contention
well for season's innocence
insisting to be seen still
prey to lame requests the ageku
stream of golden fare
a fair share of Autumn winds
For Lillian's at d'Verse's - homophone me
Chev's Carpe Diem - Universal Jane #3 river song
Good use of homophones here. :) I would enjoy the poem as a poem more if they weren't italicized. Just my opinion.
ReplyDeleteVery very interesting form!! Thanks so much for combining it with the homophones. Especially liked the wear/where stanza. Well done!
ReplyDeleteThis is a great use of the homphones, though I do prefer them not being obvious... (bold).
ReplyDeleteGot it! Both De and your goodself expressed same. Thanks for the tip De and Bjorn!
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Very interesting to combine the two!
ReplyDeleteI had to search the meaning of 'homophones', but as I now understand them ... than you did an awesome job on this Soliloquy no Renga Hank
ReplyDeleteThis is a great use of homophones.
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Interesting ....!!
ReplyDeleteNice spin on the two, many a lame request can always come due, whether from man or nature.
ReplyDeleteThey do bathe the forest floor.
ReplyDeleteThis is absolutely inspiring, Hank :D
ReplyDeleteI've never heard of this style before. A riveting read.
ReplyDeleteThis is so well done. The use of the homophones doesn't distract at all from the beauty of the poem.
ReplyDeleteWonderful!
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