Monday, February 16, 2015

Pebbles strewn along the track


Image: Courtesy of Tess' Mag (here)

Wordle #199, the given words:
angel cue crack empty wrestle held
memory acts pebbles track saintly 

Angel in disguise waiting for a cue
To crack empty promises
To wrestle off images
Held in memory of acts of betrayal

Pebbles strewn along the track
Often led them on a wild goose chase
Unwittingly causing impediments
Slowing to  a saintly progress

But mindful not to breathe a word
Broken leg accepted
As long as secrets were not spilled out
Sanctity of oath upheld

Justice came swift and silent
A mild reminder a severed ear
Or unseen pulled off finger nails
But more grisly trussed into oil drums
Perhaps found years after
A body in concrete

A consolation though
Heard say victims given freedom
To choose how best they wished
to be discovered later
when left for dead

For Brenda's hosting at Sunday Whirl Wordle # 199
And Tess' Magpie Tales # 258

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25 comments:

  1. CloudiaFebruary 16, 2015 at 10:04 PM

    You have fabulous gravity. Your lines oft fall with such self evident authority, bringing pleasure.



    ALOHA from Honolulu
    ComfortSpiral
    <3

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  2. Alex J. CavanaughFebruary 17, 2015 at 4:30 AM

    Small consolation, but then, they did choose to betray.

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  3. Brian MillerFebruary 17, 2015 at 5:30 AM

    i would be happy with some swift silent judgement....
    though the thought of torture is rather heartbreaking...
    dont think i would choose that...ha

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  4. Pat HattFebruary 17, 2015 at 5:33 AM

    Not sure a severed ear would be how I'd want to be found lol

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  5. brenda wFebruary 17, 2015 at 5:44 AM

    I love your title, Hank, and the poem does not disappoint. Well written, twisted even. Strong work.

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  6. GailFebruary 17, 2015 at 6:04 AM

    Grisly good. Sooner or later all secrets come out.

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  7. Alice AudreyFebruary 17, 2015 at 7:49 AM

    Would any choose to be found alive?

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  8. nashvillecats2February 17, 2015 at 10:00 AM

    WOW Hank you certainly used those given words to your advantage,

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  9. BerowneFebruary 17, 2015 at 11:52 AM

    Renarkable what a story you were able to tell with that collection of words. Well done.

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  10. AnonymousFebruary 17, 2015 at 3:11 PM

    what a story...:)

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  11. Holy Ghost WriterFebruary 17, 2015 at 4:05 PM

    After that death would be a mercy

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  12. TruedessaFebruary 17, 2015 at 4:59 PM

    some painful consequences to breaking that oath..yikes..

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  13. MiskyFebruary 18, 2015 at 2:50 AM

    Oh my goodness, Hank!

    ~ Misky

    https://miskmask.wordpress.com/2015/02/18/too-deep-to-contemplate/

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  14. Gillena CoxFebruary 18, 2015 at 2:53 AM

    the casualness of the title, compares starkly to the depth of emotions and action in your narrative; a good write indeed

    Thanks for dropping in to read my response at Lunchbreak

    i wish to invite you also to Monday WRites where the linky starts on a Monday and stays open 7 days, hope to see you there
    http://myblog-verses.blogspot.com/2015/02/25.html

    much love...

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  15. Anita SabatFebruary 18, 2015 at 5:48 AM

    Poignant words. Nice when we have a choice...
    Well expressed.

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  16. 21 WitsFebruary 18, 2015 at 2:39 PM

    Justice always has a way of coming to light, even if it's concrete miles away. Clever work with such artful prose by that incredible list, well done.

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  17. keiths ramblingsFebruary 19, 2015 at 8:28 AM

    An incredibly atmospheric piece which completely captured me. Excellent.

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  18. Tess KincaidFebruary 19, 2015 at 11:47 AM

    Hansel and Gretel mafia style...

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  19. HelenaFebruary 19, 2015 at 1:13 PM

    Wordles are not the easiest things to create but you incorporated this wonderfully.

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  20. AnonymousFebruary 19, 2015 at 7:44 PM

    Nice, gory wordle...enjoyed it!

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  21. Bekkie SanchezFebruary 20, 2015 at 9:04 AM

    What a great job! The mixing of prompts sounds kool! I think I may try it for fun sometime.

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  22. C.S.HFebruary 21, 2015 at 6:24 AM

    Reminds me of the walking dead, the whole atmosphere there with all the secrets and lies and dead bodies and throwing pebbles down the track, looking for good and shelter and not really knowing if it's out there.. Very very thought provoking!!

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  23. brudbergFebruary 21, 2015 at 6:59 AM

    What a sinister tale.. the end really made me feel a little sick..

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  24. UnknownFebruary 21, 2015 at 9:07 PM

    Ghastly and sad.

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  25. AnonymousFebruary 23, 2015 at 8:48 AM

    wow!! you did a great job mixinb both the prompts!! Alas my mind dint work well!! i wanted to combine them both too! could never get it right!! i loved your poem thoroughly!

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