flutter pirouettes spills
forgotten moments decision
resolute neglected cloudy
children stains miserable
She kept looking into the glass window
Imagining herself as the prima donna
Fluttering and floating as the falling snow
Executing pirouettes in forms from afar
Just as agile she could take the spills
Forgotten but moments of her affliction
Resolute and brave with strong wills
Resolute and brave with strong wills
She was to insist for a strong decision
She had neglected it for far too long
An issue no more as cloudy as before
An issue no more as cloudy as before
Read it on the ‘net it could be done
Negative thoughts were just a damper
Children charted out their own destiny
Parents did understand and gave support
Stains on thoughts could sow infamy
Been miserable so enough of the rot
Been miserable so enough of the rot
Should then able to whirl with the flow
Just a simple surgery to make it even
Others born with ten dainty little toes
Couldn't understand why she had eleven
Phew! What a surprise you gave us in that last line.
ReplyDeleteWell done ... and agree with Viv ... what a surprise ending!
ReplyDeleteYes! Yes! I agree... what a delightful turn at the very last line as graceful and surprising as a final climatic leap on stage. Bravo!
ReplyDeleteI never saw that twist coming. Fantastic work!
ReplyDeleteThey make their own way indeed, nice twist to, with one too many a toe
ReplyDeletenice twist at the end...
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ReplyDeleteHa.. yes wonder if it's easier or harder with that extra toe.. :-)
ReplyDeleteInteresting and original write - there was much to enjoy here and some very strong lines too, like: "Stains on thoughts could sow infamy..." Thank you... With Best Wishes Scott www.scotthastie.com
ReplyDeleteEvery child wants to fit in and whether it be red hair, spectacles or even an extra toe this is an extra burden for the them. I was color blind and even this caused great mirth!
ReplyDeleteHank, you surprised me with your closing line......I do hope she was then able to twirl to her heart's desire.
ReplyDeleteEleven toes? You have rocked the prompt with your creativity.
ReplyDeleteYes, children don't always understand why they are different.
ReplyDeleteWow, Hank, this blew me away. The little would-be ballerina, and here, with my dark and twisted mind I thought it was something sinister (as I am wont to do!). Eleven toes. Whew! Great little mystery here, wonderful solution. Love, Amelita
ReplyDeleteMost creative Hank. Loved the dancers and of course your verse.
ReplyDeleteI love this Hank - especially the unexpected ending!
ReplyDeleteLovely poem with a nice little twist!
ReplyDeleteHmph. Give or take a toe, this is masterful.
ReplyDeleteChildren definitely have to chart their own destiny. Very nice poem!
ReplyDeleteStains on thoughts . . . love that . . . and what a surprise ending.
ReplyDeleteGreat writing. The flow of the poem feels like a smooth dance.
ReplyDeletevery enjoyable read. i especially enjoyed the ending!
ReplyDeleteSurprising finish--nicely done!
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