Wednesday, February 15, 2012

Desire

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Extending the hand
Create a relationship
A yearning unleashed

Quaint but it is true
Stuck-up immaturity
Creates obstacles

Estranged from the group
A Desire unfulfilled
An ostracized soul

Submitted for Haiku Heights #106 with prompt 'Desire' and d'Verse OpenLinkNight week 31
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19 comments:

  1. Pat HattFebruary 15, 2012 at 5:07 AM

    Desire can be fickle, get what you want and find it isn't what you need, or very well could be.

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  2. LisaFebruary 15, 2012 at 5:31 AM

    This is so true.

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  3. hedgewitchFebruary 15, 2012 at 7:25 AM

    Loving the first lines especially, Hank. Immaturity and posing are the killers of sincerity and connection.

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  4. ClaudiaFebruary 15, 2012 at 8:19 AM

    i whole-heartedly agree with what hedge said above..

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  5. AnonymousFebruary 15, 2012 at 8:33 AM

    If you can't be yourself, you won't be any good at being who you aren't. Nice write!
    http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2012/02/14/i-cant-do-this-anymore/

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  6. Brian MillerFebruary 15, 2012 at 9:00 AM

    def a cold feel in this hank...it is a risk any time we extend that hand...sometimes it is warm and others not so much at all....def agree with the above comments as well....

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  7. ayalaFebruary 15, 2012 at 4:43 PM

    Loving the first lines.... A good write !

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  8. flaubertFebruary 15, 2012 at 5:24 PM

    I love charles' advice. How very true it is. Ah, humans are so complex, aren't they, Hank?

    Pamela

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  9. JJ Roa RodriguezFebruary 15, 2012 at 7:22 PM

    Wonderful truthful words pareng hank...

    JJRod'z

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  10. UnknownFebruary 15, 2012 at 8:14 PM

    We cannot find who we truly are, it seems immersed in an illusion of community. That desire for truth of self caught wonderfully here. For we do seek solidarity with others, it might be our highest purpose, but never at the risk of losing your soul.

    A Desire unfulfilled
    An ostracized soul

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  11. Dave KingFebruary 16, 2012 at 4:14 AM

    Excellent. These work equally well as individual verses or as one poem. The first one is a real cracker!

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  12. Mark ButkusFebruary 16, 2012 at 9:30 AM

    Each haiku reads as a separate chapter that ties together one narrative. Well done.

    Cheers,

    Mark Butkus

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  13. Amy Barlow Liberatore/Sharp Little PencilFebruary 16, 2012 at 4:38 PM

    While the hand is warm, people can be so cold. I was ostrasized in high school because I had to walk with a cane (juvenile arthritis in hips, which is now coming back as "grown up" version). These haiku each reflect the urge we all have to connect... thanks, Hank. Amy
    http://sharplittlepencil.wordpress.com/2012/02/13/bobbis-mom-sunday-whirl/

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  14. Magical Mystical TeacherFebruary 17, 2012 at 6:24 PM

    Desire unfulfilled can be deadly...


    A Desire Shattered

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  15. GraceFebruary 17, 2012 at 8:22 PM

    I like this line :

    An ostracized soul

    Have a good weekend Hank ~

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  16. J Cosmo NewberyFebruary 18, 2012 at 3:04 PM

    I find it a very gentle poem, perhaps due to the haiku format. Doesn't really seem to capture the pain and hurt of the topic. Not necessarily a bad thing, of course.

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  17. Brian MillerFebruary 18, 2012 at 7:53 PM

    hank, i got my package...it is proudly hanging on the fridge right now...smiles....

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  18. Madeleine Begun KaneFebruary 19, 2012 at 11:02 PM

    Wonderful haiku. I enjoyed them all.

    Madeleine Begun Kane

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