Gone!
Gone were the days
Of fun and laughter
Of tumbles and trauma
Gone were the feelings
Of wanting to be an adult
To do adult things
And get rewarded
Gone were the backyard
That witnessed the tears
Of the childhood experience
And the triumph of
Boyhood strength
Gone were the neighborhood
Whose kids have grown
And flew to new nests
Gone were the houses
Close to your heart
To make way for developers
To enrich themselves
But we still witness
The antics of those vying
For higher office where
Gone were the players of old
Replaced by new ones
Where the game is still the same
Only the players have changed!
Note: In Poetry Jam one is encouraged to create an Anaphora Poem where there is a repetition of a word throughtout. I've chosen the word 'Gone"
Submitted for Poetry Jam's Anaphora Poem and d'Verse's OpenLinkNight Week#33
bam! way to lay it down hank...yes the game is still the game and just the players have changed...great use of the style poem as well...great use of repetition...
ReplyDeleteThanks Brian! I'm still trying to come to terms with the WV matter. It is as yet to be resolved the way I would want it!
DeleteHank
Most great to read Hank.
ReplyDeleteWith the pleasures of travelling comes the jetlag so please excuse shortness of comment.
Yvonne.
No problem! Welcome back, Yvonne!
DeleteHank
Great poem. By miles your best yet - of those I've read, anyway. So congratulations and keep it up! I am now going back for another read.
ReplyDeleteThanks Dave! Appreciate it! In fact I had borrowed some parts of your style - no rhymes but just let it move!
DeleteHank
Beautifully conceptualized.
ReplyDeleteThanks Janaki!
DeleteHank
So very true that so much of what was good in the past is now gone. But that is the way of the world! The repetition really adds strength, I think, and your ending had maximum impact.
ReplyDeleteThanks Mary! That's the beauty of Anaphora, I suppose!
DeleteHank
Yeah everything that was good is gone and that was a pain is still here, just as you say changing up the players, but the game is always the same.
ReplyDeleteYes Pat, The game remains and the rules seldom change! Only the players are different!
DeleteHank
awesome lines and great views Pareng Hank!...
ReplyDeleteJJRod'z
Thanks ParengJJ!
DeleteHank
The repetition is really well done, and I love the message. Excellent write!
ReplyDeleteThanks MZ! You are always there.
DeleteHank
the game is still the same, yessir. playful way you wrote it.
ReplyDeleteYes Ed! Only the players are different. And some got their fingers burnt in the process!
DeleteHank
Somethings never change, old life is gone but, life goes on regardless.
ReplyDeleteNicely written Hank.
That is true! History repeats! No necessity to reinvent the wheel, somebody will do something!
DeleteHank
Nicely penned, Hank. :)
ReplyDeleterally on!
ReplyDeleteThanks Sheila and ayala! Appreciate it!
DeleteHank
The bulldozers took my childhood neighborhood and it is strange to visit there and see no remnant of those past lives. Glad I could get to your blog--when I first tried last night it said it did not exist! maybe you were working on it.
ReplyDeleteThanks Peggy! The realities of life appeasing development as a good excuse! I was playing around with the WV, on how to go about it. It took me some time. I have still not solved it.
DeleteHank
Strong. It evokes anger in me, at the neighborhoods going to the bull dozers. It's happening in my office neighborhood right now and making me nuts. Well done.
ReplyDeleteSadly, that is progress, Victoria! We grit our teeth seething while the cronies make money!
DeleteHank
Gone, but not forgotten, eh?
ReplyDeleteThanks Laurie! True enough!
DeleteHank
nice work dude
ReplyDeleteThanks dude! Appreciate it!
DeleteHank
A lovely capture of the changes of life....beautiful writing here! :-)
ReplyDeleteThanks Ma'am!
DeleteHank
Dear Hank,
ReplyDeleteIt reminds me of the movie "Gone with the wind" starring Clark Gable I think. Great poetry.
You are right! Starring Clark Gable,Vivien Leigh and Thomas Mitchell. Directed by Victor Fleming based on book written by Magaret Mitchell. It won 8 oscars! - Wiki
DeleteHank
Love this, Hank. The single-word repetition worked well, and what more poignant word to use than "gone"? Ending also true and so real. Thanks, Amy
ReplyDeleteThanks Amy! 'Gone' gave a feeling of helplessness which many lament after witnessing what's happening on the ground!
DeleteHank
always an awesome experience to read u :)
ReplyDeleteI learn a lot from your posts !!
Thanks Jyoti! Appreciate it very much.
DeleteHank
Poignant - and angry making! (Well, at least for me - I'm tired of the antics!)
ReplyDeleteThis rocked! Totally...love this style and the repetition was spot on. Great stuff.
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