Sunday, September 25, 2011

Awaiting...


Photo Image:  Courtesy of Willow's Magpie


...and Hoping

A young maiden
Vying in the evening dusk
Clinging against hope
Clasping for strength
Her beauty only for him
Neptune lost in time
But gathering storms
Building up
Bidding for a good omen
A sign of awakening
An offering nonetheless

Listless she with bated breath
Raven by her side
Spying  into the distance
Faithfully  prying
To dig into Davy Jones’ confines
Awaiting with open arms
Anticipating
Rise and come back to me!

Inspired by Tess' Magpie #84
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24 comments:

  1. JJ Roa RodriguezSeptember 25, 2011 at 9:14 AM

    Pare, i love every word on it esp the last three lines...

    JJRod'z

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  2. Pramoda MeduriSeptember 25, 2011 at 9:48 AM

    That's good one.. pic speaks too..

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  3. Maxwell Mead Williams Robinson BarrySeptember 25, 2011 at 10:30 AM

    anticipation and good omen,
    that's beautiful to have.

    very fabulous tale, thanks for sharing.

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  4. MonikaSeptember 25, 2011 at 10:41 AM

    An intense tale of love, grief and wait. Beautiful, my friend.

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  5. MaggieSeptember 25, 2011 at 11:21 AM

    Oh, a great take on the prompt.

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  6. Tess KincaidSeptember 25, 2011 at 11:22 AM

    Love the reference to Davy Jones' locker here...nice write...

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  7. Pat HattSeptember 25, 2011 at 12:16 PM

    Great tale you weaved all the way down to davy jones locker, there I wouldn't want to be a stalker, but the anticipation sure wasn't an exaggeration.

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  8. Pat-Mather Brown Gordon-ceton September 25, 2011 at 12:16 PM

    awaiting and hoping,
    that fits for all,
    what a stellar take.

    amen, bless your day.

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  9. Chronicles of IllusionsSeptember 25, 2011 at 1:11 PM

    love the inclusion of Davy Jones - clever

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  10. Lady EmSeptember 25, 2011 at 2:11 PM

    Love all of it!

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  11. Kay L. DaviesSeptember 25, 2011 at 3:21 PM

    Very well done, Hank. Full of emotion, pain, and somehow, hope.
    I must admit I was distracted by your links at the bottom of this post. One showed Muhammad Ali, so I had to look. How I do love that man!

    Kay, Alberta, Canada
    An Unfittie’s Guide to Adventurous Travel

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  12. MarySeptember 25, 2011 at 4:18 PM

    A hopeful tale of waiting for the beloved. I hope it is rewarded.

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  13. Arian TejanoSeptember 25, 2011 at 6:22 PM

    "Neptune lost in time
    But gathering storms"

    This tells me a lot. Magnificence in details.

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  14. Kay L. DaviesSeptember 25, 2011 at 6:27 PM

    Hi. Yes, thanks for asking, I'm a serious Ali fan, right from the first Clay-Liston fight and ever since. When he lit the Olympic torch a few years ago, I cried.
    —K

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  15. ReflectionsSeptember 25, 2011 at 6:50 PM

    Forever waiting...

    Neptune lost in time
    But gathering storms

    But oh such is the wait eventually rewarded. Great piece.

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  16. Brian MillerSeptember 25, 2011 at 7:59 PM

    wow...def emotive...how long will she wait...this is really well penned hank

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  17. MadhulikaSeptember 25, 2011 at 8:57 PM

    hoping and waiting.... beautiful...

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  18. hyperCRYPTICalSeptember 26, 2011 at 12:52 AM

    I do love this, very emotive - if only he could rise and come back.

    Anna :o]

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  19. Isabel DoyleSeptember 26, 2011 at 2:20 AM

    Such a lovely collection of images.

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  20. LynSeptember 26, 2011 at 6:20 AM

    True emotion of anticipation...lovely words..

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  21. LisaSeptember 26, 2011 at 9:05 AM

    I like the touch of Davy Jones, it completes the scene for me.

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  22. HelenSeptember 26, 2011 at 9:57 AM

    Thoroughly enjoyed this .........

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  23. Sean VesseySeptember 26, 2011 at 2:13 PM

    What a lover to wait for!
    Thanks for sharing...

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  24. Dave KingSeptember 27, 2011 at 1:45 AM

    To dig into Davy Jones’ confines

    Great line sparkling in a great poem.

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