Image: Wilting Sunflowers (here)
The given words:
asleep, awake
distant, near
in the distant seas across the oceans
peeking at life's norm be it sunset
or sunrise much of an open season
to lie awake with awareness intact
nearness of location to set directions
all dried up or fast asleep at daybreak
guesswork is made out as a function
of some form of order to overcome fate
van Gogh is slighted feeling uneased
wilting sunflowers unlike his masterpiece
weejars at MLMM's - opposing forces
Chrissa at The Sunday Muse #123
Perhaps Van Gogh was fascinated by the mystery held within the spiraling chains of the sunflower seeds. I liked your poem very much!
ReplyDeleteLove this Hank! Your closing lines are brilliant!
ReplyDeleteThis is wonderful Hank, much imagaination went into writing this. Thanks for sharing.
ReplyDeleteYvonne.
Opposite words and you made them all work together.
ReplyDeleteI love those closing lines, imagining Van Gogh's unease at the wilting sunflowers. Good one, Hank!
ReplyDeleteThis is pretty, Hank. Your words fit in softly with the abundace of descriptive lines.
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"to lie awake in awareness" This feels like a place of dreams between sunrise and sunset. The ending was masterful Hank.
ReplyDeleteLove the way this builds to the penultimate stanza, which sounds like a poem of algorithm only to shift directly to Van Gogh uneasy with the result. Interesting.
ReplyDelete"van Gogh is slighted feeling uneased" - that's great.
ReplyDeleteLuv the Van Gogh reference to wrap up your poem.
ReplyDeleteHoping much of the guess work lead us to solutions soon
Happy you dropped by my sumie Sunday soon
Much💝love
Considering the state our world is in I thought this line spoke volumes .... 'lie awake with awareness intact' ....
ReplyDelete"to lie awake with awareness intact" powerful statement for the times we are living, and where truth shifts with who is speaking. Love your ending lines.
ReplyDelete"lie awake with awareness intact" - strong statement and timely.
ReplyDeleteThe ending of this is superb, Hank!