Tuesday, August 11, 2015

beauty's unashamed cravings

                                                                        Attribution: C Reviver
Image: An elegant Kimono clad lady (here)

Note: A choka of a 5-7 5-7 5-7 5-7-7
syllable count and hanka of 5-7-5-7-7

APED given words:
hangs new skirt rest floor 
family such time wear above

The choka
grim looks of sadness
hangs heavily over her

contending new bids
beauty's unashamed cravings
of a skirt instead
of kimono like the rest

 floored by family's
insistence of such times to
wear more traditional garb

The hanka
not to take lightly
image of good up-bringing
shown above all else
open to scrutiny of
elders' critical comments

For Vinay's APED Prompt 73 – Midweek Wordle #11
Chev's CARPE DIEM Tokubetsudesu #56 - choka and
Sumana's at PU's Midweek Motif  -  beauty
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22 comments:

  1. nashvillecats2August 11, 2015 at 10:52 PM

    This was an excellent write Hank, your message came over and as always a [pleasure to read.
    Yvonne.

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  2. Bastet's Waka LibraryAugust 12, 2015 at 1:42 AM

    A most interesting choka Hank!

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  3. brudbergAugust 12, 2015 at 2:19 AM

    I think many people grow up between the pressure of tradition and the wishes to go forward.

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  4. Pat HattAugust 12, 2015 at 5:40 AM

    can be hard when one has tradition forced upon them

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  5. Omong Mak Long.....August 12, 2015 at 6:26 AM

    This is very good, Hank. I always find our Malaysian traditional "baju kurung Johor" are very pleasing and comfortable to wear.

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  6. Reading PleasureAugust 12, 2015 at 6:51 AM

    A powerful message!

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  7. Sanaa RizviAugust 12, 2015 at 7:29 AM

    People often forget that beauty lies in tradition as well. Excellent write :D

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  8. Sumana RoyAugust 12, 2015 at 7:39 AM

    nice take Hank...i like both the forms...in my country that contest has begun between sari and other modern garments and the beautiful sari is on the back foot...sigh..

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  9. MaryAugust 12, 2015 at 8:52 AM

    I like each of these. Artfully crafted to fit each prompt.

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  10. Sherry Blue SkyAugust 12, 2015 at 9:04 AM

    Very cool write, Hank.

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  11. NonnieAugust 12, 2015 at 9:17 AM

    well written!
    I think each generation must deal with such things. When does one's influence fade away is a realization hard to accept by parents and grandparents.

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  12. Purba chakrabortyAugust 12, 2015 at 10:11 AM

    I liked both the poems. Well penned, Hank

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  13. Holy Ghost WriterAugust 12, 2015 at 10:22 AM

    Tradition can go both ways, wonderful and not

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  14. moondustwriterAugust 12, 2015 at 2:28 PM

    A wonderful look at the cultural expectations imposed on a woman

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  15. ChèvrefeuilleAugust 12, 2015 at 3:12 PM

    Very nicely written Hank.

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  16. Rosemary Nissen-WadeAugust 12, 2015 at 4:21 PM

    Interesting social commentary.

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  17. XAugust 13, 2015 at 5:43 AM

    Forced beauty through tradition.
    She is beautiful, but she is a doll, not herself
    but if she could be, how much more beautiful
    would she be?

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  18. Gen Giggles August 13, 2015 at 5:58 AM

    Tradition can be beautiful, though as you say a persons beauty may not be traditional.

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  19. Myrna R.August 13, 2015 at 7:00 AM

    It's difficult when a person does not feel free to have choice about self-expression. How nicely you made a statement while using two forms AND selected words. Great job Hank!

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  20. Gillena CoxAugust 13, 2015 at 9:51 AM

    A nice take on beauty in relation yo cultural mores

    Thanks Hank for dropping in to read mine

    Much love...

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  21. Amy Barlow Liberatore/Sharp Little PencilAugust 13, 2015 at 2:57 PM

    Hank, I am all over this, yes. The whole woman-as-costume, how her appearance reflects on the family... this patriarchal insistence on "a woman's place," a salient, savvy commentary. Thanks, man!! Amelita

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  22. Sara mcnultyAugust 13, 2015 at 6:05 PM

    Well done, Hank. Love this.

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