Attribution: Shadows by Manoevil
Image: Picture Prompt courtesy of MMLM (here)
3WW: the given words
hauntingly impulse linger
neurosis of ideas
devoid of impulse
likened to a
shadowy apparition
nibbling routinely
in the dark corner
it set in motion
ruefully but surely
ripples that ruptured
their sense of thoughts
rigorously rollicking
as a consequence
hauntingly obnoxious
to the flock
of migrating birds
tremors of fissures
in the ground
turbulent in nature
surpassed only by
their nuisance value
nebulous thoughts
but pristine in memory
linger on
paltry to measures
contending
to assist but ended up
to be an outright
spoiler!
Note: Pablo Neruda has that uncanny
style of short lines that accompanies a
catchy flow very much like Jae Rose's
Apologies to Kanzen Sakura
Hank regretfully is not able to comment in
your blog without going through Blogger.
For Kanzen hosting at d'Verse - on poets that inspire
MLMM's picture prompt of Photo Challenge #59 and
Thomg's 3WW week 426 with the given words
Nebulous thoughts - you certainly gave it a surreal and dark feel. Well done!
ReplyDeleteGreat flow here Hank.. the way you portray the image works great for me.
ReplyDeleteSure had the flow, as away you did go. Tremors sure suck too, a spoilsport may come due
ReplyDeleteideas with drama... much to think about
ReplyDeleteFeel this neurosis...very surreal...catching short lines hauntingly flow....Cool!
ReplyDeleteCan haunt us every day
ReplyDeleteNick Nebulous would be a great Noir detective character; nice feel & cover for a Neruda cover; imaginative take on the dVerse prompt, as well as multi-tasking for other prompts; cool. I like the lines /hauntingly obnoxious/to the flock/of migrating birds/.
ReplyDeleteI do enjoy when someone can combine a multitude of prompts and not only be efficient, but do a great job! thank you for taking up my prompt. Neruda seems to be a popular inspiration and with good reason, I think. I'm sorry you can't comment. I had that initial problem commenting on this blogging platform. I got a google account which is used to be able to go across the different blogs. I use it simply for that. Thank you for wanting to comment! Hayes Spencer is Kanzensakura aka Toni
ReplyDeletethat pic is fascinating - and you captured some of the atmosphere in your verse... i'm a fan of neruda...
ReplyDeleteNeruda seems to be a favourite... understandably so...
ReplyDeleteA lot of alliteration and a tense, threatening depiction there, like a stormy sky...
Nice Hank. I love Neruda too. It's true that your short lines are like Jae Rose. I like her writing so much. And yours too.
ReplyDeleteI love the flow of this.
ReplyDeleteHank, this is so uncanny. I thought of Jae when I read the "nibbling in a dark corner" line! You captured essential elements of TWO of my favorite poets here. Wish I could have met Neruda, whose poetry was so intense, so earthy and musical. Aren't we lucky to know Jae Rose? And I know I'm lucky to know you are well.
ReplyDeleteAbout your apology - you know I'm on Wordpress, but that platform and Blogger don't always get along. Will email you an idea about how to make that all work! Love, Amelita
Thanks Amelita! Seen your email and sure will later!
DeleteHank
Truly fascinating.. to consider neurosis vs impulse of action.. as neurosis never stops thinking.. and impulse never stops doing.. i think i'll just do it.. like Nike says.. impulsively with
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and leave the thinking
to neurosis.. while i feel
the balance of impulsive
bliss..:)
Well done.
ReplyDeleteNice frolic of words and textures going into the depths!
ReplyDeleteYou really rocked the Neruda form, Hank!
ReplyDeleteYou did well with your Pablo Neruda type poem, Hank. Your short lines are indeed uncanny.
ReplyDeletenebulous thoughts
ReplyDeletebut pristine in memory
linger on
paltry to measures
contending
to assist but ended up
to be an outright
spoiler!
Great! each stanza was strong enough to stand alone and amazing flow of words!
Well done Hank on yet another excellent write.
ReplyDeleteYvonne.
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ReplyDeleteWell thank you for the mention Hank (and Amy) but I can't profess to be able to write a poem as sophisticated as this one!
ReplyDeleteBravo! combining three prompts and flowing so beautifully...wow, I love Neruda and short lines seem to give more strength in your stanzas; enjoyed reading this poem very much.
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