Thursday, May 15, 2014

Feelings get offended - A Tilus

                                                                                       Attribution: Lisa Brewster
Image: Anger (here)

Tilus: A Micro Poetry
A form created by Kelvin comprising
a syllable count of  6-3-1

1. Feelings get offended
    Crying out

    shouts!

2. Running in circles and
    appeared lost

    dope

3.  Jilted and abandoned
     Gritted teeth

     lost

4,  Great to be successful
     Happiness

     yay! 

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28 comments:

  1. nice play on emotions here hank... and it feels good to be successful - the only danger is when we connect our happiness with our success... i just wanna learn to be happy no matter what - ha - but that's something that is on my personal lessons to learn schedule...smiles

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  2. i think the third one carres the most emotion with lost...
    but i have been that dope too...smiles...

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  3. Ah, nicely done. If only we could always be that successful and quick at leaving the anger behind!

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  4. Anger has a way of taking over, doesn't it!

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  5. The contrast between the joy and the dope creates so much tension

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  6. Many have followed the Kelvin form, which seemed limited to 4 stanzas/poems; but I had so much fun with it, I whipped out a dozen; it's all good, but your Tilus 3 was my fave.

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  7. I love this, though I would probably have put them in a different order (4/1/3/2) - don't listen to me though - I have a piece of paper that says I'm crazy so what do I know... *smile* But like I said, really love this beautiful and simple description of very strong emotions

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  8. I liked how you ended your series on a happy note, Hank.

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  9. An upbeat ending - now that's good to see!

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  10. I like the turn from lost to yay ~ Good work on the form Hank ~

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  11. I like this poem. I relate a lot to the message behind this. Love it! :)

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  12. Hank, I like the various moods you have written in this set. I think, because of the happiness, my favorite is your last. Smiles.

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  13. sometimes it is the shout which is needed most...

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  14. I liked the flow of emotions the third one was a bit raw..I could feel it..well done Hank..

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  15. Can go from ticked off to yay as the emotions are at play

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  16. Your third one got to me. What an awful feeling. Very cool post, Hank.

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  17. All the myriad feelings that make us.

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  18. If one's successful to drive away anger and has control over self then will true happiness come...lovely tiluses. :)

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  19. If one's successful to drive away anger and has control over self then will true happiness come...lovely tiluses. :)

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  20. I love how these are full of action.

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  21. You veered away from the Nature poem, but to great effect. I like your interjections, which add real life, action and humour to the poems!

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  22. You're a natural Hank... and as always your versatility to various forms shine through here. I enjoyed your tiluses, Thank you! smiles.

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  23. Like 4 neat little seasons in 4 little poems.

    Happiness and success is Spring to have a friend like Hank. Summertime's hot sun scorches skin and feelings, Autumn's jilted and abandoned trees, the leaves having abandoned ship. Winter seems un-ending to some.

    Thank goodness it's always spring of friendship in the heart.

    xoox

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  24. some times success and happiness are mutually exclusive - but here, they work just right

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  25. AH! I particularly liked the part about success and the build that takes us there. Nice.

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