Friday, May 2, 2014

Vacation so profound! - a Sonnet

                                                                                 Attribution: Tarotastic
Image: Fishing for Fun (here)  

A Petrarchan or Italian sonnet comprises two stanzas
an octave and a sestet (eight lines and six lines respectively)
The octave has  a  rhyme scheme of abba abba, while the
sestet is rhymed  cdecde, cdcdcd or cdccdc

A syllable count of 10 for each line is maintained here
though not required

A             Vacation so profound in the South Seas
B             Moon half-hidden over the horizon
B             To forget life’s woes of no consequence
A             And ever so peaceful  for all to see
A             A fishing invite accepted with glee
B             Making out and forgetting life’s problems
B             Will trade with any for such occasions
A             Can one be faulted and this is no plea!

C             It had turned dark a rest sorely needed
D             Slight breeze brushing by in the cool evening
C             Ripples on water’s surface break the quiet
D             Mermaids unseen happily chattering
C             Confidently safe not part of diet
D             Anglers above content with just musings

Tony hosting at d'Verse MTB invites to write a sonnet of either the
Petrarchan, Shakespearean or the lesser known Spenserian.

19 comments:

  1. ah - that makes me wanna go on a vacation to the sea... sigh... love the chattering mermaids and the peaceful mood of your little fishing trip..

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  2. love this air of cheerfulness....

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  3. Ah..ripples on the water...glad you had a good well needed break ..sounds wonderful

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  4. ha. kind glad mermaids are not on the menu.....smiles...need to get my pole out though and go fishing...relax a bit on the waterside....no matter what i catch...

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  5. I would love to take this vacation and just relax there ~ Thank goodness the mermaids are not on the menu, ha ~

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  6. Well it certainly sounds peaceful has an Ah appeal!

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  7. haha mermaids must be very glad to not be on the menu. A nice vacation indeed

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  8. Mermaids.. Such a vacation could make even me wanna take a swim.

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  9. Not really sure what to say here, Hank. Your sonnet has some technical flaws - counting syllables doesn't always result in the correct meter and the ing syllable is not the stress in evening etc - but your poem as a whole rises above these issues and makes me want to head for the beach, even though it's pretty chilly here today.

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    1. Gosh! More technical than I thought! Had not seriously thought about them really. I wish I could but not really versed in them. Would be more challenging obviously. Looks like am meeting it half-way, not really engaging sonnets the way it should be. Thanks for your inputs Tony!

      Hank

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  10. A tough prompt for most of us, Hank, but really enjoyed your journey, your tale of beauty & relaxation. A fine effort, terrific poetic.

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    1. Thanks Glenn! Meters, da Dum... and all I conveniently left out. Hoping such would not render them utterly atrocious.

      Hank

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    1. Very much like to return comments but I find it difficult to access Cara's blog. Can anyone help? Thanks

      Hank

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  12. That sounds like the perfect spot for a vacation

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  13. I like the fishing that keeps you out after dark, a good time to hear invisible mermaids murmuring!

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  14. What a serene sonnet. The calm sea is so soothing to the soul, so stimulating to the imagination. Well done.

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  15. We all yearn for such vacations!!

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  16. I love mermauds, Hank. But all too often there's something fishy going on ;)

    Spenser wrote beautiful poetry....

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