Monday, January 13, 2014

Throes of Bad Dreams

                                                                                          Attribution: Pierre Dalous
Image: A Griffon Vulture (here)

The chosen 10 of 30 given words:
Whisper  mood  thunder  storm  hissing 
rattling  stirs  floats  scrubbed  sun

It was almost in a whisper
The mood was set
Missing was the thunder
But they got away with it

They cooked up a storm
Hissing and rattling to no end
Stirred lots of macabre forms
Of zombies and fiends

Kept floating on his mind
Endearment of his loved one
Designed as a provocation 
Go away vultures! Such annoyance

Scrubbed clean he yearned
Bad dreams were such nuisance
Waiting cringed in a baby position
Impatiently for the morning sun

Written for Miskey's We Write Poems Wordle#2
and shared with Open Link Monday at Real Toads

19 comments:

  1. But one can turn them around and then good dreams can be found

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  2. I wonder sometimes what the mind sees .. some we remember others for some reason we don't...

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  3. I love my nightmares, Hank. Weird, but it is an experience of which there is no other way to enjoy. For a bit I could see here a witch's brew being stirred up, conjured up in my mind.
    ..

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  4. Hi! our minds are open to so much- this was a good read- I like how you took a number of words and wove them into your writing.
    (newbie to mon. toads)

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  5. sounds like some overwelming stress there...that they got away with it...but haunting for sure....

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  6. I used to struggle with repetitive nightmares until I learned to work with the dream images. Some of what you write is familiar, especially that curled fetal position you mention at the end. You did well with the wordle words,

    Elizabeth

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  7. first stanza is my favorite ~

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  8. Hank, You did a fantastic job with the words here.
    Hope all is well with you, my friend.

    Pamela

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  9. Glad I'm reading this in the morning and not before I went to bed!

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  10. I adore the edginess of this poem. It's tight and tense, and very memorable. Thank you very much, Hank, for joining us for this week's We Wordle. Hope to see you again next week!

    Misky

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  11. I know too well of nightmares...
    I've been told that writing about them gives them honor and sets them free.

    I played here:
    http://juleslongerstrandsofgems.wordpress.com/2014/01/13/qweekly-and-wwp-more-than-just-a-ticket/

    Thanks for joining We Write Poems, bunch of nice folks here!

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  12. no need to wait for the sun… the internet is there :)

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  13. Ohhhh, that's a little bit frightening!

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  14. These words puzzled in perfectly! I like the addition of the buzzard imagery and the bad dreams. Nicely done!

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  15. It was almost in a whisper the mood was set...great opening lines. Can't stop reading after reading those.

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  16. Welcome to WWP, Hank. I love the story you weaved with the words.

    Interestingly enough, when I read Misky's comment above ("It's tight and tense, and very memorable") my subconscious turned "memorable" into "miserable". And it is that too...your images convey the horror and misery your character endures from these eidolons in the night.

    -Nicole

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