Wednesday, August 14, 2013

An Evening of Rain

                                                                                                Attribution:  jinxin
Image: Weeping Willows after The Rain
Source: Wikimedia Commons (here)

passing under the leafy willows
of a street of temples
an evening of rain
drab and dragging a day of
silence with no signs of life

passing under the leafy willows
of a street of temples
an evening of rain
quiet respite of solace
in the offing for many

passing under the leafy willows
of a street of temples
an evening of rain
where it is not to dampen 
spirits of those wanting fun

Note: Somehow I'm taken with the demure quiet, surrounding the haiku and
decided to create 3 Tan Renga

Written for Chev's Tan Renga Challenge #10 where the haiku of  Shirao  is
given (in italics) as a prompt. We are to complete a Tan Renga with an
additional 2 lines of 7-7 syllables. 

19 comments:

  1. Fun can be found rain or shine, respites are sure fine to by this feline

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  2. FYI your streak is now 35 in a row. I checked my spam today and you were there. That one on the 24th puts you in front of John.

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    1. Thanks a lot Pat! That is true! You know what happened! I got in at 7.00am But when I clicked again mine wasn't there. Instead there was John's and it registered 7.02am. I was terribly disappointed. You see I had accessed you from outstation using another computer. That could be the reason.I didn't make a fuss about it not knowing then why it happened that way! But I was disappointed.

      I've gone back a few minutes ago to your July 24, 2013 posting and honest to goodness you CORRECTED it! My gosh, Pat, I raise my hat to you,Sir! That's most gentlemanly of you! I really appreciate it! I'll make a notation at my post 1) for record purposes and 2) to register the exhilaration of a 35 continuous streak.

      On hindsight I should have alerted you immediately and you would be able to check there and then and corrected it. But it didn't cross my mind to do that then. But it's just amazing you had corrected it today. I wonder what prompted you to check it out of the blue!

      Thanks once again Pat for alerting me! It gives a great feeling, a really great feeling!

      Hank

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    2. Glad it was found and the truth came out. I just decided to look and you were in there with that one and a few from Grace.

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  3. One of my favorites of yours, Hank. I LOVE the repeated lines occurring in each stanza........really beautiful work.

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    1. Thanks Sherry! I thought repeating it makes the presentation better!

      Hank

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  4. Each one is beautiful. Wonderful way to complete a renga.

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  5. Awesome Hank. Every time as I publish a Tan Renga Challenge you come up with more then one completions and these are all marvelous. Thank you for your effort and sharing.

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    1. Thanks Kris! It's too good to pass off with just one. So I thought 3 at one shot is more satisfying!

      Hank

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  6. i rather like the bit of solace one myself...it def is peaceful....

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    1. You can say that again Brian! Thanks a lot!

      Hank

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  7. ...excellent Hank... your Tan Renga has both calming & sad quality to it... and then your pull at the end gives a mystical feel as if Titania was there sharing romance with Pan... so much to conceive from a weeping willow... loved this... smiles...

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    1. Thanks Kelvin! Contrasting situations help pull off a better shot, I guess!

      Hank

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  8. Hank, this is beautiful writing. I understand the form better after your comments... loved the three ways the rainy day is viewed, and the weeping willow is my favorite tree. Do you know the old jazz song, "Willow, Weep For Me"? It's mournful and gorgeous. Love you, Amelita

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    1. Yes Ma'am, I went to YouTube. Very sentimental and moving - mournful too! One can expect that from Frank Sinatra. There were a number of other singers as well including the husky voiced Diana Krall. Thanks Amelita!

      Hank

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  9. Love your proes - soothing as a hymn.

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