Thursday, July 11, 2013

Desires in Calm Waters

                                                                                Attribution: Andy Beecroft
Image: A Young Couple Trying to Make Up
Source: Wikimedia Commons (here)

Whispers of sweet nothings softly
Knocked a little a time expecting
How efficient it was to be silly
Pushed in as much of the same trying

Love knew no bounds but still insisting
Mindful of being snubbed as before
Trudged on tenacious in reckoning
Persisting and pulsating even more

A sly smile was all that he perceived
But just as well there was a response
Open your heart and not to deceive
Desires in calm waters not enjoined

Note: Not schooled in poetry writing wondering if this is acceptable.

Tony hosting at d’Verse’s Forms for All with  - bang bang bang crash on the intricacies of
writing accentual alliteration.


  1. quite lovely!

    ALOHA from Honolulu
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  2. sometimes it is hard to love again esspecially after being snubbed, but love surprises us and finds a way when we least expect it, so...smiles

    yeah, you are good hank.

    1. Thanks Brian! Honestly I'm lost! Took the cue from others and hoping for the best.


  3. smiles..sounds like there's something tender going on... and trust is always a step towards the unknown...

  4. hiccups do come in between..
    but people in love do overcome that :)

    Smiles !!

    been away for a while.. hope you are doing fine !!

  5. Oh the battle of love and communications.. usually it sorts itself out..

  6. the way i read this, some of the alliterative sounds seemed to be in the word rather than the beginning, which made me more aware of stressed syllables. i liked the rhyme scheme as well. you have conveyed a sense of hopeful yearning.

  7. Hank, a very lovely poem--funny how those sly smiles can either get you into trouble or out of it ;-)

  8. Neatly written Hank - and as Heidi says, some of the alliterative sounds are contained within the words, which makes them more subtle.

    This is a lovely poem too; I hope it works out for them in the end.

  9. Yeah, but have to take chances I suppose, still hard to do

  10. Hank, I found this very well crafted. Love the first stanza... hope they'll work it out!