Saturday, September 8, 2012

Autumn Chills


                                                                                     Photo by Mary Kling
Image: Courtesy of Mary taken from dVerse

Spurs
Autumn's
magical
new abundance
Fulfillment and maturity heightened
Cheering fans, happy,some trepidation,
What is the dare?
Mindful that
Life is
Fair!

Note: Tetractys, a poetic form invented by Ray Stebbing, consists of at least 5 lines of 1, 2, 3, 4, 10 syllables (total of 20). Tetractys can be written as a Double Tetractys with 2 verses, but must follow suit with an inverted syllable count
I’ve chosen to write such a Double Tetractys of 1, 2, 3, 4, 10, 10, 4, 3, 2, 1

Written for Mary's Poetics: Autumn Chills in the Air at d'Verse

22 comments:

  1. as much as we think it not at times i would say it ends pretty well in balance...cool form as well hank...what is to come will whether we worry about it or not...smiles.

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  2. I hope it is! Always I hope for fair.

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  3. Lively piece. The form is really interesting too!
    Thanks for the visit and comment.

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  4. Tetractys, a new poetic form to me ... I like it!

    Like your autumnal poem too :)

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  5. Loved the way you wrote this one !!!

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  6. Useful to explore how form and subject affect each other

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  7. Great verse this - and a great new (to me)form to boot. thanks for both. A fine start to a new day's visiting!

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  8. Balance is nice in seasons and poetry. Very nice, Hank!

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  9. Enjoyed your poem, Hank! I do hope 'life is fair' when it comes to our football season this year, which begins today. I will be one of those 'cheering fans' of whom you speak!! Fun to see my photo at your site. Smiles.

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  10. Life is fair? I have serious doubts!

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  11. Not really fair but I like autumn's magical abundance ~

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  12. Though it doesn't seem
    Like more than a pipe dream
    Life can surely be fair
    Even if it is kind of rare

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  13. I love autumn for all of its colours and smells, but don't want the cold that follows it.
    Nice writing Hank!

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  14. This is so cool. You've inspired me to try the form myself. I enjoyed how it felt to read it... it has a beat that I like.

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  15. You used that form so well plus gave it a nice fall flavor!

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  16. Lovely form where form follows function here. I kept thinking as I re-read it how many different autumn images it looked like - stacks of leaves, pylons on a football field, cheerleader megaphones, bonfires, etc. and loved the play on words as well!

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  17. Hank,

    I love your autumnal words, which have been expertly illustrated in this very clever form.

    Eileen

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  18. Very clever, sir. I like the form,and the sentiment (I sure hope life is fair; sometimes I wonder). But especially I like the honesty behind "some trepidation." Thank you.

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  19. A new form for me as well..I like it!

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  20. Wonderful, kiddo. You mastered the form very well.

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