Tuesday, July 24, 2012

Time

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Would time have allowed
for us to wallow in the quick sand
of life’s sorrows devoid of luxuries

Would time have denied us the
right of food and shelter instead
and of poverty staring squarely at one
that is lifeless, reeking of sweat and slime
in the basement, home of the down-trodden
to be shared with trash and rodents
  
Would time have been harsh
to condemn us into the bottomless
abyss of those who had sinned
tired and spent of desire to fulfill?

God forbid!

Time would be gentle to reward
those who offered  all goodness of life’s
pleasures and good fortune
commensurate to efforts tirelessly
extended to those unfortunates
of society and unselfishly shared

Time is a great equalizer!


Shared with d'Verse OpenLinkNight week#54 and Poets United's vice-versa #8 with antonyms allow/deny and harsh/gentle as prompts

21 comments:

  1. Time can be fickle
    As out it does trickle
    I'll take the later for me
    As the rest has no glee
    And first at your shore
    0-2 today for Brian at each floor

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  2. hank, i really love this verse...and esp the stanza of time being gentle...i think we often look at how time goes so quick and often seems to rob us....but i like your verse very much my friend...hope you week is going well...

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  3. great write Pare! you bet a lot of true things to realize on these verses.

    Pareng JJ

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  4. I think that's true...eventually things will equal out. Let's hope sooner than later!

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  5. I really love this one too. I think time is gentle it's a lot of us humans who aren't. This is one of my most favs of yours Hank. :)

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  6. I really love this one too. I think time is gentle it's a lot of us humans who aren't. This is one of my most favs of yours Hank. :)

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  7. I like the positive spin of time in the end...it's a great equalizer, I agree ~

    Happy day Hank ~

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  8. Well, I sure hope time is a great equalizer. I like the hope you infused in this poem. So nice.

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  9. I too, enjoy the hope in this and this word bump made me happy..."staring squarely," nice!!

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  10. time has so many textures and characteristics

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  11. Time is a great equalizer for sure..made me think of michael ende's MOMO with the time thieves..

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  12. I have never quite looked at time this way - this is a novel idea and well expressed. To find something new is always a pleasure and something to ponder. Thank you!

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  13. Most think of death as the great equalizer, but indeed it is time. For time surpasses even death as it's always moving forward with or without us.

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  14. "The quality of mercy is not strained.
    It droppeth as the gentle rain from heaven,
    Upon the place beneath.
    It is twice blessed.
    It blesseth him that gives and him that takes."

    A bit of agreement from the most racist of Shakespeare's plays--just substitute " in for him: It blesseth Time that gives and Time that takes. And despite this, Time may not remove the harshness in time, alas. Great details and question form.

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  15. Time waits for no man or so I'm told :) I love this piece!

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  16. I love this, Hank. :) great !

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  17. I think you have captured so vividly the role that time plays in bringing us to awareness of who we are and can become. There's so much strength and courage in your verses. I find them very hopeful and loving.

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  18. Time is a great equalizer!
    Very true!..Beautiful poem :)

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  19. I appreciate your fresh perspective, gave me something to think about!

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  20. Yes indeed, time is a great equalizer. I enjoyed your perspective and participation in Vice/Versa.

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  21. For me, the best parts of the poem are the subtle structure you use for emphasis - the insistent "would time", the internal rhymes in each verse - shows how the poetic sensibility can be instinctive.

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