Tuesday, August 11, 2015

beauty's unashamed cravings

                                                                        Attribution: C Reviver
Image: An elegant Kimono clad lady (here)

Note: A choka of a 5-7 5-7 5-7 5-7-7
syllable count and hanka of 5-7-5-7-7

APED given words:
hangs new skirt rest floor 
family such time wear above

The choka
grim looks of sadness
hangs heavily over her

contending new bids
beauty's unashamed cravings
of a skirt instead
of kimono like the rest

floored by family's
insistence of such times to
wear more traditional garb

The hanka
not to take lightly
image of good up-bringing
shown above all else
open to scrutiny of
elders' critical comments

For Vinay's APED Prompt 73 – Midweek Wordle #11
Chev's CARPE DIEM Tokubetsudesu #56 - choka and
Sumana's at PU's Midweek Motif  -  beauty


  1. This was an excellent write Hank, your message came over and as always a [pleasure to read.

  2. I think many people grow up between the pressure of tradition and the wishes to go forward.

  3. can be hard when one has tradition forced upon them

  4. This is very good, Hank. I always find our Malaysian traditional "baju kurung Johor" are very pleasing and comfortable to wear.

  5. People often forget that beauty lies in tradition as well. Excellent write :D

  6. nice take Hank...i like both the forms...in my country that contest has begun between sari and other modern garments and the beautiful sari is on the back foot...sigh..

  7. I like each of these. Artfully crafted to fit each prompt.

  8. well written!
    I think each generation must deal with such things. When does one's influence fade away is a realization hard to accept by parents and grandparents.

  9. I liked both the poems. Well penned, Hank

  10. Tradition can go both ways, wonderful and not

  11. A wonderful look at the cultural expectations imposed on a woman

  12. Forced beauty through tradition.
    She is beautiful, but she is a doll, not herself
    but if she could be, how much more beautiful
    would she be?

  13. Tradition can be beautiful, though as you say a persons beauty may not be traditional.

  14. It's difficult when a person does not feel free to have choice about self-expression. How nicely you made a statement while using two forms AND selected words. Great job Hank!

  15. A nice take on beauty in relation yo cultural mores

    Thanks Hank for dropping in to read mine

    Much love...

  16. Hank, I am all over this, yes. The whole woman-as-costume, how her appearance reflects on the family... this patriarchal insistence on "a woman's place," a salient, savvy commentary. Thanks, man!! Amelita